In the flutter-storm
of your indifference,
impaled and hung up
on your shrine—
your one mistake,
you missed my heart—
I found my footing,
one toe, one claw—one, two, at a time.
Now, I’m sending you a message
by your own barbed wire—
an epitaph to call, to cry your own,
“Here lies
your lies”—your blacks, your whites,
gray no more of my skies.
I was your patient zero,
but not one of your nine.
© 2025 Jennifer Wagner
Shrikes impale their prey on thorns and barbed wire fences to save for later and to hold while tearing apart to eat. They often have black and white plumage and their nicknames are “butcher bird” and “nine-killer,” which refers to folklore that they must kill nine victims before eating one. And since it’s Day Nine…
NaPoWriMo 9 challenge: use both rhyme and uneven line lengths
Shay’s Word Garden Word List: epitaph, shrine, skies
This poem very cleverly rises from the background information about the shrike. "I found my footing, one toe, one claw..... at a time" and "not one of your nine" are such a positive reflection of the narrator's strength.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful. I can't say it any better than Sherry did.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is enriched by your references to the natural world and the instinctual level of cruelty it can carry. A very vivid comparison, well executed. I especially like "..gray no more of my skies..' and your final lines.
ReplyDeleteI love the combination of the shrike and the human side of this poem! That is fascinating about the "nine killer"! As a card carrying nerd, I love that stuff! And as a poet I love your stuff.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the victory message of this poem, it starts so subtle and builds with such strength.
ReplyDeleteechoing the above. fine writing, Jen ~
ReplyDeleteWow. This poem is to die for (pun intended)! A wonderful symmetry, where the tables have turned and that last stanza? A killer.
ReplyDelete"sending you a message / by your own barbed wire" Brilliant.
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