Thursday, June 27, 2013

Full Circle from the High Road



You asked me how I felt,
after the year gone shipwreck
in the land of the malignant albatross,
and I could never answer you completely—
my chest too constricted, my voice,
mutilated and rasping in the wind.

You asked me how I felt,
and I have found words now,
though I have only wings for yesterday
fitted to fly in a sky I no longer believe in.

You asked me how I felt,
but I will hold my tongue
and watch patiently from my perch
the crow you will have to eat
nesting among wolfsbane and water hemlock,
while I am gaining strength to dip my feathers
and soar above the vultured horizon.

You asked me how I felt
and soon you’ll know
how it feels.



© 2013 Jennifer Wagner

For dVerse where Victoria has us writing anaphora poetry.

*wolfsbane and water hemlock are highly toxic plants.

25 comments:

  1. oh snap...i hear the menace in the voice there in the end...mmm too on the tale...the abandonment, left to survive...yes, perhaps they do need to learn how it felt...smiles...ha, nice job using the poetic device...

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  2. Smart ending... and I love the first stanza.

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  3. I love the repeating line and your very poetic scathing responses never to be heard...until the time is right. Very nice!

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  4. Smack! Loved the energy behind this. And that line about dipping feathers, gaining strength. I wish I'd written that. Great use of anaphora, Jennifer.

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  5. Oops the wolfsbane and hemlock sounds like a cold serving... what a platitude the question "how do you feel" can be... Only make thinks worse... great piece

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  6. "vultured horizon" - really like that image and connotations so soon after crow/wolfsbane & hemlock, Jennifer ~ M

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  7. this was a bit of a journey for me... lovely phrases: " and watch patiently from my perch the crow you will have to eat" one of my favs

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  8. though I have only wings for yesterday
    fitted to fly in a sky I no longer believe in.

    Loved this Jennifer!

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  9. Love the 3rd verse specially, and the turn in the last one ~ I also like vultured horizon ~

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  10. reads wounded, defiant, triumphant. The movement of the piece comes across honest and therefore meaningfelt.

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  11. A soaring write with great marine and avian images. Also, you peaked my curiosity on anaphora poetry - only to discover, I've occasionally written it without knowing that the device had a name. Thanks, Jennifer.

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  12. Wow, wow, wow! Sometimes it truly is best if one holds one's tongue and watches from one's own perch. Sometimes it is better just NOT to say the words. You used anaphora beautifully.

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  13. This is beautiful Jennifer. The strength behind the sadness prevails. Love the second stanza especially, what a weave of words.

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  14. Interesting with scary promise.

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  15. WOW! Fantastic write!"fitted to fly in a sky I no longer believe in"....just brilliant!

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  16. Shows the deep emotion of love and pain

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  17. Love the twist and strength at the end!

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  18. oh heck... really well done..love the storytelling in this and the emotions..so palpable...

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  19. I love the attitude in this one. Not revenge but more of a "you'll get yours" kind of thing. Very cool.

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  20. You asked me how I felt
    and soon you’ll know
    how it feels

    A classic ending, Jennifer! Almost as a lesson in being aware of how others had to suffer. One gets to feel more when one is at the receiving end. Nicely!

    Hank

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  21. This was cleverly done..sort of a slap in disguise..loved the ending.

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  22. ...soar above the vultured horizon

    the vultured horizon...I definitely know what that looks like...I can so relate to this piece...felt.

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  23. "but I will hold my tongue
    and watch patiently from my perch
    the crow you will have to eat"

    Love this line. Sometimes time is the lesson that people have to learn...they'll eventually have to eat that crow, even if it takes a while.

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  24. though I have only wings for yesterday fitted to fly in a sky I no longer believe in.

    Reminds me of Irish Airman and Ash Wednesday together. You will soon know... is brilliantly threatening.

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