She’d had
too much winter
and spring
came
with summer
on its heels
like two pigtailed
girls twirling in the sweet, tall grass, holding hands.
And then it blew,
that low whistling, calling pixies to play
with a
language none of them knew she understood;
and then the
moon, the moon—
so hopeful, bright
and round,
and who
can compete
with the moon.
© 2013
Jennifer Wagner
smiles...love the image of those innocent girls in the tall grass...the freedom of the season sings in them...the magic of the pixie call...that might compete just a bit with the moon but its pretty amazing...smiles.
ReplyDeleteLove it! In my mind nothing can quite compete with the moon;)
ReplyDeleteMagical. A beautiful layering of images that connotes a passage of time as whimsical and mysterious. Love:
ReplyDelete"like two pigtailed girls twirling in the sweet, tall grass, holding hands". A really inspired simili.
who indeed? - smiles -
ReplyDeleteTotally. In. Love. With. This. Poem.
ReplyDeleteHow do you come up with such imagery is out of my minds reach, ive always been a moon lover..
ReplyDeleteI absolutely love this!
ReplyDeleteWho indeed. Great write.
ReplyDeletesmiles...who could compete with the moon...love the overflow of emotions after that too long winter..such a freedom in this
ReplyDeleteSuch a special gift to write of wonders unknown and unseen but I can clearly imagine what you have written. I'll follow the pixies whenever they call ♥
ReplyDeleteVery pleasant moment at work. And yes 'who can compete with the moon?" >KB
ReplyDeleteCaught up happily here.
ReplyDelete"who can compete with the moon"? Indeed; I was at Kerry Park on Queen Anne viewing that Super Moon two weeks ago...your words reminded me of all that beauty.
ReplyDeleteVery lyrical - alovely read - Thank you, I'll be back for more.. Regards Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteLovely verse, Jennifer. In my humble opinion, no one...absolutely no one....can compete with the moon!!!
ReplyDeleteFreely 2 young girls in a world of innocence. Competing with the moon is a long term yearning that can be answered with other successes. Great write Jennifer!
ReplyDeleteHank
who can compete with the moon indeed! :-)
ReplyDeletenot the sequence of the seasons
and loved the opening lines,
"She’d had too much winter
and spring came" -
set the tone through the end
as several have said, very lyrical indeed!
thanks so much jennifer, best wishes for you :-)
I am in awe of the moon..magical who could compete???
ReplyDeleteNo one can compete... this was so delicate and just lovely.
ReplyDeleteLove the cast of characters. I saw girls with 'summer on its heels.'
ReplyDeleteYes..the moon so magical like this poem.
ReplyDeletewho can compete with the singularity of the moon. thank you,
ReplyDeletethat's a lot of poem in a few words! well done.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery in this, and the closing question, are beautiful, Jennifer. I was wondering about some of your line lengths though; is there a reason why you've chosen to have some quite long lines rather than dividing them into shorter ones? I ask because my instinct would have been to divide them.
ReplyDeleteAll those tongues of descending flames, not sure where you are, but here in Aus is midwinter, so spring is a faint possibility, that we are all desperately hoping for... Cheers
ReplyDeleteBeautiful write. Was this inspired by the "super moon" last week? Wasn't that amazing?
ReplyDeleteAh, the moon. You just can't compete with the moon, eh?
ReplyDeleteNo-one can compete with the moon. A lovely lyrical poem, Jennifer.
ReplyDeletePamela
This brought such a smile to my face...sheer delight.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your poem!
ReplyDeleteso hopeful, bright, and round ... I can't compete with the moon.
This is a new favorite poem. Just perfect!
ReplyDeletelove the visuals here
ReplyDeleteI just love this!
ReplyDeletebeautiful wording and flow here..so truly poetic these lines sing ' with summer on its heels
ReplyDeletelike two pigtailed girls twirling in the sweet, tall grass, holding hands..'. magical poem..