Friday, January 16, 2015

Resurgences (2 tenWords)

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winter garden
tiny grave beds
(tu)lips are whispering,
come, spring”


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tracing her scars
like braille, mouthing,

I
lived
to
tell



© 2015 Jennifer Wagner

For dVerse, the tenWord, a form created by Brian Miller.

26 comments:

brudberg said...

I especially like the darkness of the second one.. but as a pair the first one gives hope as well.

Claudia said...

oh i whisper along the tulips... can't wait until spring spreads its colorband across the world again...the second one has a great intensity

Anonymous said...

Both of these are so different, both beautiful in their own way. The second, I can relate to--the first, love the grave beds and promise.

Kathy Reed said...

Both make me think of living the moment.

Anonymous said...

Great imagery in the first one. And the second is intense and powerful.
-HA

Mary said...

Wonderful word play in your first one, Jennifer. And, ha, it will be a little while before tulips get their wish!!! Smiles.

Brian Miller said...

dang. so much feeling packed into that first one...the grave beds esp....
same with the second one....solid pieces...

Anonymous said...

Love the first one because I, too, long for spring to come. But that second one offers hope is such a different, and deeper, way. Nice job. Peace, Linda

Scarlet said...

I like the tu-lips in the first, and the scars like braille ~ So well done ~

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh I so like what you've done with the form.

Truedessa said...

I really enjoyed the first one waiting for the arrival of spring through frozen ground.

Gabriella said...

Very different but both very evocative poems. In the second I also like the layout and how it reinforces the image.

janetld said...

very good what you've done with just ten words!
I like how these go together: whispering and mouthing. and so striking/memorable, especially "grave beds" and "tracing her scars like braille."

Unknown said...

(tu)lips... very clever.... and I loved the tracing of scars; you def made it...

Ginny Brannan said...

I loved the second one the most, reminds me of my dear husband, who brags that his "scars" are his tattoos!

Anonymous said...

both beautiful - the 2nd stunningly so

Anonymous said...

wow - the last really touched me

kaykuala said...

There is so much yearnings and anticipation in the first one! Great lines Jennifer!

Hank

Wolfsrosebud said...

longing for spring in 10 words... nice... and the second interesting how you gave it form

Outlawyer said...

Very well done--the braille one is especially compelling. Thanks. This is Manicddaily from wordpress! So many problems commenting these days. K.

ds said...

Yes, the braille poem is very powerful. Excellent. I won't look at my garden the same way this winter, either--grave beds, wow. Thank you for these

Maude Lynn said...

The second one . . . wow.

Jody Lee Collins said...

Oh, that Brian Miller. Brilliant! I'm gonna have to try this, Jennifer.
Your concise words are spectacular.

Unknown said...

Both have different imagery but are connected with 'hope'

Anonymous said...

I like the double meaning you achieved by writing (tu)lips

grapeling said...

damn, Jen ~