Monday, February 25, 2013

Sandmorphs of the Amethyst Moon



The watchful eye of the bleeding heart moon
turned amethyst,

her vellum glowed in its gaze—
a canvas for creatures of prey.

Black sand morphed white on her toes,
confectioners’ sugar

to said creatures
making them voraciously bay.

Storm clouds rained dirt
for moments turned years

while she learned to make bloodcastles
with hellbowls of tears.

Sorry for what they’d done,
treacherous birds of root

flew from her tormented refrain
to nest and to watch from beaches of soot.

A pièce de résistance complete
in its unfinishing,

thus, she set off to hunt prey of her own.
She tortured a few, but could kill only time,

true more to herself than a rule.
She’d only been waiting on setting cement,

and Prince Charming’s repent
for having left her alone in the light of such an encouraging moon.


Copyright © 2013 Jennifer Wagner

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56 comments:

Judy Roney said...

This was a fun and interesting poem. Dashed be the Prince Charming that left her alone in the light of such an encouraging moon. Love the encouraging moon.

Fireblossom said...

Every line of this is a revelation. "hellbowls of tears"? Beaches of soot? Get out. And then that arch ending. I love it.

Margaret said...

All sorts of things I envisioned... read it three times and I'm not sure I understand it, but it is haunting, that's for sure.

Jim said...

I think she's waited long enough for the lout.
Somehow in my reading I could imagine this happening in early England.
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Brian Miller said...

Black sand morphed white on her toes,
confectioners’ sugar

to said creatures
making them voraciously bay....really like that bit as it sets the tone of this for me...really moving closure as well...him leaving her alone under the moon....which is pretty amazing tonight i might add...

ND Mitchell said...

Wow. This rewards multiple readings. Such an atmospheric piece with amazing imagery of darkness. I really loved this.

anthonynorth said...

So much going on here - and great atmosphere.

asteria's canvass said...

you win my heart every time i visit you...

Claudia said...

while she learned to make bloodcastles
with hellbowls of tears...oh wow..love the intensity of this..

ayala said...

Storm clouds rained dirt
for moments turned years

while she learned to make bloodcastles
with hellbowls of tears....great lines here, intense and captivating. Love this.

Abin Chakraborty said...

I too loved the idea of moments turned years and your use of compound words to such great effect.loved it.

Unknown said...

Confectioner's sugar sand... sooty beaches... you compare and contrast and carry us steadily to that last surprising stanza.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/02/26/intensity-toward-blue/

Tracy Kuhn Greenlee said...

the travels of a fairy tale made into poetry. beautifully written and thank you

Tashtoo said...

Nothing worse than to be left alone when the moon is working its magick...fantastic tale

alan1704 said...

Storm clouds rained dirt
for moments turned years

I love these lines - sums up days and feelings

Bodhirose said...

That "hellbowls of tears" grabbed me too...powerful, a dark fairy tale for sure...

WabiSabi said...

Enjoyed this from start to finish, how you drew me in with the 'bleeding heart moon' to set the tone, then your rich interesting use of language.... 'til the final line and the hope it offers with the 'encouraging moon."

S.E.Ingraham said...

Whoa - this grabbed me and would not let go - so many vivid images and juxtapositions - all of them fascinating and enigmatic ... love "bloodcastles" and that she "tortured a few" and "treacherous birds of root" to name a few ... excellent work.

http://aleapingelephant.blogspot.ca/2013/02/the-trees-stand-watch_26.html

mrs mediocrity said...

So many great lines.... hellbowls of tears, I just adore that. Great sense of mystery, loss, longing, very magical.

blueness said...

oh my. the title itself deserves applauds, Jennifer. a very tight and effective nocturnal imagery captured my heart as i enjoyed to read and re-read it. 'she learned to make bloodcastles
with hellbowls of tears' and 'encouraging moon' are fantastic..and many more lines actually. i just love what you've done with language here, pure magic.

Wendy Bourke said...

A tragic princess, I think, "waiting on setting cement" she did not wish to wait on.

Anonymous said...

Very dark atmosphere but i do love this...
"while she learned to make bloodcastles
with hellbowls of tears." Lines that stay in the memory.

Optimistic Existentialist said...

"She tortured a few, but could kill only time"

POWERFUL

Lisa Williams said...

What an enchanting piece! Such a wonderful play with words and I love the sense of a dark fairytale theme. Superb!

Stan Ski said...

Great, visual piece...

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you enjoyed it Judy, thank you.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much Shay!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for reading Margaret!

Jennifer Wagner said...

ha...amen! hmm...early England, I like that.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Always nice to enjoy an amazing moonlit night...thank you Brian!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much for your compliments David, they mean a lot!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you sir anthony!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Such a lovely compliment...thank you so much!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you do Claudia!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much ayala!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Abin, your compliments mean a lot to me, thank you.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for reading and commenting on it Kim.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much for that Tracy.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks much Natasha!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for saying so Mametz.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for stopping by and commenting Bodhirose.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it WabiSabi, it means a lot that you did!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I so appreciate your compliments S.E. Your words are encouraging!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I appreciate that Kelly, thank you!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Wow Yelena...your opinion really means a lot to me, so thank you for such lovely words!

Jennifer Wagner said...

And I think you are right!

Jennifer Wagner said...

'Dark' was definitely intended...thanks Di.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm glad you found it so Keith!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Lisa, your thoughts on it mean so much, thank you!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Stan.

TCPC said...

watch and wait...is all the moon can do! with a little given to vampire instincts, i may say, to add to the dark shadows, created so well here adding to the milieu!

Sadia Khan said...

Too powerfull and dark imagery....dark enough to haunt the reader for hours...read it thrice to grasp as much as i can...:)

lucychili said...

sounds like mayhem =)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for commenting Akila.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for reading Sadia.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Metaphorically speaking of course :)