Saturday, February 2, 2013

First Blush

mirrored
cherry lip gloss
in pale pink wish for spring
a light breeze bringing blossom thoughts
of you



Copyright © 2013 Jennifer Wagner

My adapted offering for the Weekend Mini-challenge at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads where Marian has challenged us to write a Cinquain; a form of poetry created by American poet Adelaide Crapsey.

66 comments:

Marian said...

ooooh i LOVE this one! yippee!
not long for cherry blossoms, and maybe a switch from lip balm to lip gloss :)

GoddessChhavi said...

Ah! Lovely! :D That's a very intricate work how you've mixed up "someone's" thoughts with spring blossoms (blushing you and spring).

Susan said...

I love the title as it could be a she or a flower or a tree.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

This is so lovely!!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I am honored you do as you are a master of the cinquain! I think I may be hooked now...

Grace said...

I too love the title, bring forth the blossom thoughts ~

Great work on the form ~

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much Chhavi! :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Susan.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Audrey! :-)

Janine Bollée said...

Jenni, this is so sweet and uplifting.
Something to go on a greeting c\ard.

Brian Miller said...

a light breeze bringing blossomed thoughts of you...smiles....love that line...and def great titling as well...

Fireblossom said...

The way you've worded this, and the mood it conveys is so cool. I'm really becoming a fan of what you do here.

Lolamouse said...

Google doesn't want to take my comments! Third try: a lovely cinquain! Can't wait for the cherry blossoms to bloom!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks very much Grace.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks aprille :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Brian! Hope you enjoy your trip today :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Hold the phone! A true compliment to me indeed Shay.

Jennifer Wagner said...

arghh...hate it when google gags...but I got it! And so glad I did! Thank you :-)

Kateri said...

A light breeze bringing thoughts
of you.
That is so perfect.

Helen said...

Sweet, yummy cherry blossom sweet!

Anonymous said...

What a beautiful romantic use of the form!

Jennifer Wagner said...

'blossom thoughts' heh...thank you :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Helen :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you razz :)

Kathy Reed said...

great use of the form..like a heightened haiku;)

Valleypoet said...

A light breeze bringing blossom thoughts...a great line:-))

vivinfrance said...

I love the romance of this.

Sadia Khan said...

Not sure if its me only...but your poetry seem to be so delicious ...it enhances my craving and hunger for more...yumm yumm

Laura said...

a fresh sweetness to this:-)

ND Mitchell said...

Don't know much about the cinquain but this is brilliantly written.

Anonymous said...

Very nice!

Optimistic Existentialist said...

SO beautiful..this made my morning :)

hedgewitch said...

Pink can be insipid, but it can also be subtle and tender--that's what I'm getting here, along with the cherry blossom fragility, and a strong metaphor in those thoughts of the Other which bloom as they do, fragrant, sudden, and making a huge difference. Lovely cinquin.

Anonymous said...

you could have cherry lip gloss that is so glossy, it is like a mirror.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love it! There is romance and hope in it.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you, glad you think so :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks viv.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Color me flattered Sadia! Thank you :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Laura...I suppose that is what I was going for heh :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

I didn't either but I have really taken a liking to this form! Thanks very much ND, always appreciate your words.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you!

Jennifer Wagner said...

aww thanks! I'm honored :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for reading hedge. You are one of the most thoughtful commenters; I always appreciate your thoughts on my writes.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you! And thanks for following too :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

you could...

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Susie :-)

Ella said...

As spring should be! I love the wonder n' romantic wish, in your poem! It is beautiful~ :D

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Ella! Happy day to you :-)

my heart's love songs said...

beautiful cinquain!

Lady In Read said...

blossomed thoughts of you.. so lovely..
and i realized i do not have a title for my cinquain:)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks very much!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you much Lady :) A few others have read it that way as 'blossomed' however 'blossom' is actually the intended. And you must have added a title because there it was when I popped over to read it :)

Jannie Funster said...

Beautifully romantic, Jennifer!

Nothing spells magic like lip gloss ready to rumble. :)

xoox

Jennifer Wagner said...

Varrooomm! ;)

Janet Martin said...

I smiled when I read this poem, so delicate, so lovely. Thank-you for the link to No Turning Back! I have it cranked to the top while I do dishes:) Your words and Chris Tomlin's have encouraged me today.

God bless~

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Janet...and you are quite welcome, anything to help when doing dishes :P God bless you as well :-D

ayala said...

Beautiful!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you :)

RMP said...

wistful. my toes (and chapped lips) too long for spring. the ending lines are lovely.

Wolfsrosebud said...

hope of spring in your words

Anonymous said...

Well done

Jennifer Wagner said...

I am so longing for spring...I hope punxsutawney phil is right.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Yes, that too.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you.

blueness said...

that's simply beautiful. love the idea of breeze bringing blossom thoughts of someone dear..

Jennifer Wagner said...

It was fun to use this form...I shall have to do it again I think. Thank you so much Yelena! :-)