Saturday, February 2, 2013

First Blush

mirrored
cherry lip gloss
in pale pink wish for spring
a light breeze bringing blossom thoughts
of you



Copyright © 2013 Jennifer Wagner

My adapted offering for the Weekend Mini-challenge at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads where Marian has challenged us to write a Cinquain; a form of poetry created by American poet Adelaide Crapsey.

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66 comments:

  1. MarianFebruary 2, 2013 at 12:46 PM

    ooooh i LOVE this one! yippee!
    not long for cherry blossoms, and maybe a switch from lip balm to lip gloss :)

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 2, 2013 at 1:24 PM

      I am honored you do as you are a master of the cinquain! I think I may be hooked now...

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  2. CVFebruary 2, 2013 at 12:57 PM

    Ah! Lovely! :D That's a very intricate work how you've mixed up "someone's" thoughts with spring blossoms (blushing you and spring).

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  3. SusanFebruary 2, 2013 at 1:01 PM

    I love the title as it could be a she or a flower or a tree.

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  4. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 2, 2013 at 1:11 PM

    This is so lovely!!

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  5. GraceFebruary 2, 2013 at 1:24 PM

    I too love the title, bring forth the blossom thoughts ~

    Great work on the form ~

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  6. Janine BolléeFebruary 2, 2013 at 1:51 PM

    Jenni, this is so sweet and uplifting.
    Something to go on a greeting c\ard.

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  7. Brian MillerFebruary 2, 2013 at 2:02 PM

    a light breeze bringing blossomed thoughts of you...smiles....love that line...and def great titling as well...

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 2, 2013 at 4:34 PM

      Thank you Brian! Hope you enjoy your trip today :)

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  8. FireblossomFebruary 2, 2013 at 2:07 PM

    The way you've worded this, and the mood it conveys is so cool. I'm really becoming a fan of what you do here.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 2, 2013 at 4:39 PM

      Hold the phone! A true compliment to me indeed Shay.

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  9. LolamouseFebruary 2, 2013 at 3:33 PM

    Google doesn't want to take my comments! Third try: a lovely cinquain! Can't wait for the cherry blossoms to bloom!

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 2, 2013 at 4:42 PM

      arghh...hate it when google gags...but I got it! And so glad I did! Thank you :-)

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  10. KateriFebruary 2, 2013 at 7:38 PM

    A light breeze bringing thoughts
    of you.
    That is so perfect.

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  11. HelenFebruary 2, 2013 at 7:45 PM

    Sweet, yummy cherry blossom sweet!

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  12. AnonymousFebruary 2, 2013 at 8:11 PM

    What a beautiful romantic use of the form!

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  13. Kathy ReedFebruary 2, 2013 at 11:24 PM

    great use of the form..like a heightened haiku;)

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  14. ValleypoetFebruary 3, 2013 at 2:05 AM

    A light breeze bringing blossom thoughts...a great line:-))

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  15. vivinfranceFebruary 3, 2013 at 2:09 AM

    I love the romance of this.

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  16. Sadia KhanFebruary 3, 2013 at 3:01 AM

    Not sure if its me only...but your poetry seem to be so delicious ...it enhances my craving and hunger for more...yumm yumm

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  17. LauraFebruary 3, 2013 at 8:07 AM

    a fresh sweetness to this:-)

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 3, 2013 at 7:17 PM

      Thanks Laura...I suppose that is what I was going for heh :-)

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  18. ND MitchellFebruary 3, 2013 at 8:44 AM

    Don't know much about the cinquain but this is brilliantly written.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 3, 2013 at 7:25 PM

      I didn't either but I have really taken a liking to this form! Thanks very much ND, always appreciate your words.

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  19. AnonymousFebruary 3, 2013 at 8:45 AM

    Very nice!

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  20. Optimistic ExistentialistFebruary 3, 2013 at 9:14 AM

    SO beautiful..this made my morning :)

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  21. hedgewitchFebruary 3, 2013 at 9:46 AM

    Pink can be insipid, but it can also be subtle and tender--that's what I'm getting here, along with the cherry blossom fragility, and a strong metaphor in those thoughts of the Other which bloom as they do, fragrant, sudden, and making a huge difference. Lovely cinquin.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 3, 2013 at 7:33 PM

      Thanks for reading hedge. You are one of the most thoughtful commenters; I always appreciate your thoughts on my writes.

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  22. AnonymousFebruary 3, 2013 at 4:41 PM

    you could have cherry lip gloss that is so glossy, it is like a mirror.

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  23. Susie ClevengerFebruary 3, 2013 at 6:34 PM

    Love it! There is romance and hope in it.

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  24. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 3, 2013 at 7:34 PM

    Thank you! And thanks for following too :)

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  25. EllaFebruary 3, 2013 at 7:38 PM

    As spring should be! I love the wonder n' romantic wish, in your poem! It is beautiful~ :D

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  26. my heart's love songsFebruary 3, 2013 at 11:24 PM

    beautiful cinquain!
    ♥

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  27. Lady In ReadFebruary 3, 2013 at 11:59 PM

    blossomed thoughts of you.. so lovely..
    and i realized i do not have a title for my cinquain:)

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 4, 2013 at 12:15 AM

      Thank you much Lady :) A few others have read it that way as 'blossomed' however 'blossom' is actually the intended. And you must have added a title because there it was when I popped over to read it :)

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  28. Jannie FunsterFebruary 4, 2013 at 10:24 AM

    Beautifully romantic, Jennifer!

    Nothing spells magic like lip gloss ready to rumble. :)

    xoox

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  29. Janet MartinFebruary 4, 2013 at 4:43 PM

    I smiled when I read this poem, so delicate, so lovely. Thank-you for the link to No Turning Back! I have it cranked to the top while I do dishes:) Your words and Chris Tomlin's have encouraged me today.

    God bless~

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 4, 2013 at 7:04 PM

      Thank you Janet...and you are quite welcome, anything to help when doing dishes :P God bless you as well :-D

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  30. ayalaFebruary 5, 2013 at 10:24 AM

    Beautiful!

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  31. RMPFebruary 5, 2013 at 5:12 PM

    wistful. my toes (and chapped lips) too long for spring. the ending lines are lovely.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 6, 2013 at 9:33 AM

      I am so longing for spring...I hope punxsutawney phil is right.

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  32. WolfsrosebudFebruary 5, 2013 at 5:15 PM

    hope of spring in your words

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  33. AnonymousFebruary 5, 2013 at 7:08 PM

    Well done

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  34. bluenessFebruary 26, 2013 at 8:00 PM

    that's simply beautiful. love the idea of breeze bringing blossom thoughts of someone dear..

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    1. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 27, 2013 at 10:59 AM

      It was fun to use this form...I shall have to do it again I think. Thank you so much Yelena! :-)

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