Saturday, February 2, 2013

First Blush

mirrored
cherry lip gloss
in pale pink wish for spring
a light breeze bringing blossom thoughts
of you



Copyright © 2013 Jennifer Wagner

My adapted offering for the Weekend Mini-challenge at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads where Marian has challenged us to write a Cinquain; a form of poetry created by American poet Adelaide Crapsey.

68 comments:

  1. ooooh i LOVE this one! yippee!
    not long for cherry blossoms, and maybe a switch from lip balm to lip gloss :)

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    1. I am honored you do as you are a master of the cinquain! I think I may be hooked now...

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  2. Ah! Lovely! :D That's a very intricate work how you've mixed up "someone's" thoughts with spring blossoms (blushing you and spring).

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  3. I love the title as it could be a she or a flower or a tree.

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  4. I too love the title, bring forth the blossom thoughts ~

    Great work on the form ~

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  5. Jenni, this is so sweet and uplifting.
    Something to go on a greeting c\ard.

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  6. a light breeze bringing blossomed thoughts of you...smiles....love that line...and def great titling as well...

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    1. Thank you Brian! Hope you enjoy your trip today :)

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  7. The way you've worded this, and the mood it conveys is so cool. I'm really becoming a fan of what you do here.

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    1. Hold the phone! A true compliment to me indeed Shay.

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  8. Google doesn't want to take my comments! Third try: a lovely cinquain! Can't wait for the cherry blossoms to bloom!

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    1. arghh...hate it when google gags...but I got it! And so glad I did! Thank you :-)

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  9. A light breeze bringing thoughts
    of you.
    That is so perfect.

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  10. Sweet, yummy cherry blossom sweet!

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  11. What a beautiful romantic use of the form!

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  12. great use of the form..like a heightened haiku;)

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  13. A light breeze bringing blossom thoughts...a great line:-))

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  14. Not sure if its me only...but your poetry seem to be so delicious ...it enhances my craving and hunger for more...yumm yumm

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    1. Thanks Laura...I suppose that is what I was going for heh :-)

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  16. Don't know much about the cinquain but this is brilliantly written.

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    1. I didn't either but I have really taken a liking to this form! Thanks very much ND, always appreciate your words.

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  17. Pink can be insipid, but it can also be subtle and tender--that's what I'm getting here, along with the cherry blossom fragility, and a strong metaphor in those thoughts of the Other which bloom as they do, fragrant, sudden, and making a huge difference. Lovely cinquin.

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    1. Thanks for reading hedge. You are one of the most thoughtful commenters; I always appreciate your thoughts on my writes.

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  18. Gorgeous! I love it, cherry blossoms and all :)

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  19. you could have cherry lip gloss that is so glossy, it is like a mirror.

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  20. Love it! There is romance and hope in it.

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  21. As spring should be! I love the wonder n' romantic wish, in your poem! It is beautiful~ :D

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  22. blossomed thoughts of you.. so lovely..
    and i realized i do not have a title for my cinquain:)

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    1. Thank you much Lady :) A few others have read it that way as 'blossomed' however 'blossom' is actually the intended. And you must have added a title because there it was when I popped over to read it :)

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  23. Beautifully romantic, Jennifer!

    Nothing spells magic like lip gloss ready to rumble. :)

    xoox

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  24. I smiled when I read this poem, so delicate, so lovely. Thank-you for the link to No Turning Back! I have it cranked to the top while I do dishes:) Your words and Chris Tomlin's have encouraged me today.

    God bless~

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    1. Thank you Janet...and you are quite welcome, anything to help when doing dishes :P God bless you as well :-D

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  25. wistful. my toes (and chapped lips) too long for spring. the ending lines are lovely.

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    1. I am so longing for spring...I hope punxsutawney phil is right.

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  26. that's simply beautiful. love the idea of breeze bringing blossom thoughts of someone dear..

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    1. It was fun to use this form...I shall have to do it again I think. Thank you so much Yelena! :-)

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