cherry lip gloss
in pale pink wish for spring
a light breeze bringing blossom thoughts
of you
Copyright © 2013 Jennifer Wagner
My adapted offering for the Weekend Mini-challenge at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads
where Marian has challenged us to write a Cinquain; a form of poetry created by
American poet Adelaide Crapsey.
67 comments:
ooooh i LOVE this one! yippee!
not long for cherry blossoms, and maybe a switch from lip balm to lip gloss :)
Ah! Lovely! :D That's a very intricate work how you've mixed up "someone's" thoughts with spring blossoms (blushing you and spring).
I love the title as it could be a she or a flower or a tree.
This is so lovely!!
I am honored you do as you are a master of the cinquain! I think I may be hooked now...
I too love the title, bring forth the blossom thoughts ~
Great work on the form ~
Thank you very much Chhavi! :-)
Thanks Susan.
Thank you Audrey! :-)
Jenni, this is so sweet and uplifting.
Something to go on a greeting c\ard.
a light breeze bringing blossomed thoughts of you...smiles....love that line...and def great titling as well...
The way you've worded this, and the mood it conveys is so cool. I'm really becoming a fan of what you do here.
Google doesn't want to take my comments! Third try: a lovely cinquain! Can't wait for the cherry blossoms to bloom!
Thanks very much Grace.
Thanks aprille :)
Thank you Brian! Hope you enjoy your trip today :)
Hold the phone! A true compliment to me indeed Shay.
arghh...hate it when google gags...but I got it! And so glad I did! Thank you :-)
A light breeze bringing thoughts
of you.
That is so perfect.
Sweet, yummy cherry blossom sweet!
What a beautiful romantic use of the form!
'blossom thoughts' heh...thank you :)
Thanks Helen :)
Thank you razz :)
great use of the form..like a heightened haiku;)
A light breeze bringing blossom thoughts...a great line:-))
I love the romance of this.
Not sure if its me only...but your poetry seem to be so delicious ...it enhances my craving and hunger for more...yumm yumm
a fresh sweetness to this:-)
Don't know much about the cinquain but this is brilliantly written.
Very nice!
SO beautiful..this made my morning :)
Pink can be insipid, but it can also be subtle and tender--that's what I'm getting here, along with the cherry blossom fragility, and a strong metaphor in those thoughts of the Other which bloom as they do, fragrant, sudden, and making a huge difference. Lovely cinquin.
Gorgeous! I love it, cherry blossoms and all :)
you could have cherry lip gloss that is so glossy, it is like a mirror.
Love it! There is romance and hope in it.
Thank you, glad you think so :)
Thanks viv.
Color me flattered Sadia! Thank you :-)
Thanks Laura...I suppose that is what I was going for heh :-)
I didn't either but I have really taken a liking to this form! Thanks very much ND, always appreciate your words.
Thank you!
aww thanks! I'm honored :)
Thanks for reading hedge. You are one of the most thoughtful commenters; I always appreciate your thoughts on my writes.
Thank you! And thanks for following too :)
you could...
Thanks Susie :-)
As spring should be! I love the wonder n' romantic wish, in your poem! It is beautiful~ :D
Thank you Ella! Happy day to you :-)
beautiful cinquain!
♥
blossomed thoughts of you.. so lovely..
and i realized i do not have a title for my cinquain:)
Thanks very much!
Thank you much Lady :) A few others have read it that way as 'blossomed' however 'blossom' is actually the intended. And you must have added a title because there it was when I popped over to read it :)
Beautifully romantic, Jennifer!
Nothing spells magic like lip gloss ready to rumble. :)
xoox
Varrooomm! ;)
I smiled when I read this poem, so delicate, so lovely. Thank-you for the link to No Turning Back! I have it cranked to the top while I do dishes:) Your words and Chris Tomlin's have encouraged me today.
God bless~
Thank you Janet...and you are quite welcome, anything to help when doing dishes :P God bless you as well :-D
Beautiful!
Thank you :)
wistful. my toes (and chapped lips) too long for spring. the ending lines are lovely.
hope of spring in your words
Well done
I am so longing for spring...I hope punxsutawney phil is right.
Yes, that too.
Thank you.
that's simply beautiful. love the idea of breeze bringing blossom thoughts of someone dear..
It was fun to use this form...I shall have to do it again I think. Thank you so much Yelena! :-)
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