I so get this piece, Jennifer. In my case, I think the title would have to be "Mother". I don't think you could find two more different woman - especially since, I gather we shared DNA. But one does work through these things (or dies trying). At the end of her life, we were even able to make the occasional joke about it. But it is hard, joined for life to someone who doesn't get you at all. It does come down to one thing. I was "daughter". She was "mother" and there was love there - though, not the kind of love that I share with my children . . . not even close.
Man, there is a lot of depth to this despite eight short lines. It's terrible to have to bear the weight that someone else imposes on you because they can't see who you really are. Well done.
This piece is as powerful as it is succinct. I guess, nobody can really know us completely, including our own selves. I've been feeling quite a stranger in my own skin lately. So, on another level, this poem also constitutes the dialogue I sometimes have with my own self.
I so get this piece, Jennifer. In my case, I think the title would have to be "Mother". I don't think you could find two more different woman - especially since, I gather we shared DNA. But one does work through these things (or dies trying). At the end of her life, we were even able to make the occasional joke about it. But it is hard, joined for life to someone who doesn't get you at all. It does come down to one thing. I was "daughter". She was "mother" and there was love there - though, not the kind of love that I share with my children . . . not even close.
ReplyDeleteI think every mother and daughter get this piece even if it wasn't written with that in mind--I feel this
ReplyDeleteno one wants to be a one note song...esp when there is so much more to appreciate about us...perhaps in the end she is better off....
ReplyDeleteJudgment is a horrible thing and leaves it's mark. Knowing that they were wrong helps - along with a warm cup of tea and a shoulder to lean on :-)
ReplyDeleteMakes me think of possessive love and how it judges all that we do. Live and let live is what is needed in this world.
ReplyDeletei can feel this. very powerful, Jennifer.
ReplyDeleteshallow sight
ReplyDeleteyou should seek beyond your eye
unseen is more
Just this instant's, inspired senryu echo. _m
Excellent senryu, Magyar.
DeleteMan, there is a lot of depth to this despite eight short lines. It's terrible to have to bear the weight that someone else imposes on you because they can't see who you really are. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is as powerful as it is succinct. I guess, nobody can really know us completely, including our own selves. I've been feeling quite a stranger in my own skin lately. So, on another level, this poem also constitutes the dialogue I sometimes have with my own self.
ReplyDeleteLoved this.
wow...heavy...no pun intended...I can feel the weight bearing down...really nicely done.
ReplyDeleteShort but poignant. I can relate too!
ReplyDeleteThis is so powerful, Jennifer. Such few words that coud lead to hours of discussion. Thought-provoking and moving. Great piece.
ReplyDeletesinuous. thought-provoking. powerful ~
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