the bubonic bitterness
in the backyard;
built a bonfire
of the behemoth boa
It’s better off
instead of boiling
on my back.
© 2014 Jennifer Wagner
For Imaginary Garden with Read Toads, Words Count with Mama Zen: a confession in 65 words or less.
heck yeah...best to get it off your back
than to weigh you down...smiles...nice play with the b's
Amen to that. That repeated B seems to say bad bad bad all the way through. Maybe this treatment made it better better, but truly, I couldn't tell if the character was still alive or already dead!
An excellent write - filled with awesome imagery. It reminded me of that timeless quote from Mark Twain: Anger is an acid that can do more harm to the vessel in which it is stored than to anything on which it is poured.
Oh yeah, a great write about ending any connection to bitterness and its cause
I love the b's words ~ Better off the back & let go of bitterness ~
buh bye ~
Reminds me of my daughter, who had a midnight bonfire in the driveway one full moon and burned her wedding dress. In our family, we dont go in for understatement. Hee hee. Thanks for the poem - and the memory.
How clever and talented you are! The b's work together for good effect.
Yeah it' s better to leave bad things and bad memories.
Isn't this the truth!! I loved the symbolism here. Bitterness and anger are MUCH better burned and buried :)
How cleverly written, the B's just added that extra touch!
I love this one-so clever to go with the b's! It rolls off the tongue and reminds us to leave bitterness behind. Well Done
Wonderful--and absolutely the only way to be, if you can manage it. Thanks. k.
"Poet Laundry" has been included in the A Sunday Drive for this week. Be assured that I hope this helps to point even more new visitors in your direction.
This is great. I love it!
oh for sure it is... not fun to carry bitterness around with us - better get rid of it - the sooner the better
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