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| The artistry of SueAnn. Used with permission. |
Damp yellow leaves
and a hanging gray
settled upon November
with sharp scents of
burning wood
and smoke encircling chimneys.
Head down, she
trudged ‘home’
rain splattering her
jacket
and hiding bright
tears.
November, the month
she knew more than
leaves
were dying.
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner
dang....that made me shudder deep a bit...more than the leaves were dying...you build the feeling slowly and then its like BAM...nicely played...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian! And thanks too for offering the prompt and bringing us the opportunity to use SueAnn's work.
Deleteah anytime...hope you had a great week as well...popped by to make sure i had not missed something...happy saturday!
DeleteThe ending lines are terrific ~ Good one ~
ReplyDeleteThank you Heaven.
DeleteOh.... I wasn't expecting that last line, now we're left to wonder who is dying, her, herself or, someone she loves and has just been told the news.... Omgoodness, very effective in its intent to make one 'feel' the words.
ReplyDeleteThanks for 'feeling' the piece Bren!
DeleteOK so your left line was like a rug beneath me... so who died?!
ReplyDeleteLoved the read :)
Thank you king, glad you enjoyed!
DeleteGorgeous picture. You captured its mood perfectly with your poem! Well done. Yes, that last line, unexpected which makes it so terrific.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Janet--and SueAnn does great work doesn't she?
DeleteOOh, that ending....I think it makes everyone reflect on other deaths they have known or those in their lives who might be facing death.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you think it makes a connection with readers, thanks Mary.
DeleteShe knew more than leaves were dying. Excellente. And the line - settled upon November - is classic. A great write and read I truly emjoyed.
ReplyDeletehenry- thanks so much for your comment, a lovely compliment!
DeleteNovember - the days of grays in my mind - you capture the cloudy interior here so well.
ReplyDeleteThey are the 'days of gray' to me too...thanks Beachanny.
DeleteYou've captured so much in this moment, senses can be quite acute at times of sorrow... loved the feeling a wonderful write...and read.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much cat--I so appreciate your complimentary words on the piece.
Deletethat last line carries a lot of weight. quite a powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteGlad you found it so, thanks RMP!
DeleteI felt like I have read a novel. Deep and intriguing.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Lisa.
DeleteGorgeous! You leave so much to the imagination - so much here that is unsaid! This is really intriguing - love the sinister undertones at the end
ReplyDeletemarousia- thanks so much for enjoying the 'mystery'...a wonderful compliment, thank you.
DeleteWho is she and why is she so sad??? Living in melancholia...lol I need to buy you some flowers and build you a cozy fire!
ReplyDeleteYou know who she is...and I'll take you up on the flowers and cozy fire!
DeleteSad and strong. I ended reading the poem thinking of Spring though, so maybe the metaphor contains hope?
ReplyDeleteGlad you brought it around to Spring p-d...after all Spring is always around the corner. Thanks for reading!
DeleteOuch -- sad. Short, poignant, powerful writing. Thank you
ReplyDeleteThanks for feeling it Sabio, and commenting too.
DeleteWell that leaves an awful lot for us to wonder about... The poem none the worse for that, of course. Quite the reverse. The fascination extends beyond the last line.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dave...glad it carries through! Thanks for reading.
DeleteBeautiful poem...thank you for using one of my pics!!
ReplyDeleteWhat an honor.
Hugs
SueAnn
It was an honor to be able to use your work SueAnn! I'm so glad you like the poem that came out of my musing on this beautiful piece. Thanks so much for sharing it, and for visiting me and commenting.
Deletereads beautifully. Great ending.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much wolf.
DeleteThe end is indeed profound but I keep wondering why home is in quotes, very powerful.
ReplyDeleteWas wondering if anyone picked up on the quotes-- which are a piece to ponder in the write. Glad you came by rch--thanks for your comment!
Deleteperfect poem for the picture... well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Bing!
DeleteThe rest of this story...intriguing!
ReplyDeleteGlad you were intrigued Karen-thanks!
DeleteWhat a powerful ending... wasn't expecting that. I love when that happens!
ReplyDeleteGlad you do Serena!
DeleteNovember can be deceiving. It's the end all of life in a year's span. So, what or who else are dying! Nicely Jenny!
ReplyDeleteHank
Yes it can be deceiving! Thank you Hank.
DeleteWow - so much in your poem! I'm hanging on wanting more details!
ReplyDeleteThanks Robyn-glad it grabbed you!
Deletepoignant close.nicely done.evocative picture as well.
ReplyDeleteI love this picture of SueAnn's, really a great piece to write on. Thanks so much Abin.
DeleteDeath and tears in November, oh God, I feel my own poem being born. Thanks for the inspiration.
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome, can't wait to read it :)
DeleteGreat impact to the closing line..poignant and beautiful..thanks
ReplyDeleteThank you Nilanjana.
DeleteI want more too - this poem made me remember going home from school in the autumn dusk when I was a sad teenager.......the final line really hits home......fantastic writing!
ReplyDeleteThough sad in essence, I'm glad it was effective and made a connection with you. Thank you so much!
DeleteVery well written, beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and for your lovely comment Daisy.
DeleteSo beautiful, I always felt a sadness associated with November and all that we look forward to has perished, and once again face winter. A wonderful depiction!
ReplyDeleteI always feel it to...thank you very much Lisa!
DeleteBeautifully expressed sadness.
ReplyDeleteThank you Cressida.
Deleteclimactic, well done
ReplyDeleteThanks Tatius.
DeleteNovember is a month that grays a person, perfect depiction of that heaviness and then that emotional kicker of an ending--well done! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Sara :)
Deletebeautifully written and a perfect ending!
ReplyDelete♥
The last two lines were the highlight for me. Beautiful writing. Great use of imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks for enjoying it!
DeleteHaunting!
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading Rosemary.
DeleteYour last line surprises and perfects the piece.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kim, very much.
DeleteSad and melancholy. A true November poem. We feel it in the gray and in the leaves. Thanks for posting.
ReplyDeleteGlad you think I captured it...thank you.
DeleteSo good I wished you had gone on to tell more...quite the photo for so many different responses...
ReplyDeletehmm...perhaps I will...it is a great photo, isn't it? Thanks for coming by and commenting on it!
DeleteLovely. The surprise at the end made me gasp. The photo and words match marvelously.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lori, so much!
ReplyDeleteReally exceptional - very delicate, as is all secret hurt. Beautifully and perfectly illustrated. Also, thanks for your kind remarks on my latest "launch".
ReplyDeleteThank you Wendy, and I am looking forward to your new site :)
DeleteI'm in LOVE with your way with words. Makes me want to go erase everything I've done and start over.... sigh. I've been touring the civil war battlegrounds now that I live in the south.... this reminds me of them.
ReplyDeleteWow! You don't know what a compliment that is to me! I am a huge fan of your work. I so admire your style--don't change a thing. Your words have really made my day!
Delete...and yours mine! :)
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