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| The artistry of SueAnn. Used with permission. |
Damp yellow leaves
and a hanging gray
settled upon November
with sharp scents of
burning wood
and smoke encircling chimneys.
Head down, she
trudged ‘home’
rain splattering her
jacket
and hiding bright
tears.
November, the month
she knew more than
leaves
were dying.
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner
85 comments:
dang....that made me shudder deep a bit...more than the leaves were dying...you build the feeling slowly and then its like BAM...nicely played...
The ending lines are terrific ~ Good one ~
Oh.... I wasn't expecting that last line, now we're left to wonder who is dying, her, herself or, someone she loves and has just been told the news.... Omgoodness, very effective in its intent to make one 'feel' the words.
OK so your left line was like a rug beneath me... so who died?!
Loved the read :)
Gorgeous picture. You captured its mood perfectly with your poem! Well done. Yes, that last line, unexpected which makes it so terrific.
OOh, that ending....I think it makes everyone reflect on other deaths they have known or those in their lives who might be facing death.
She knew more than leaves were dying. Excellente. And the line - settled upon November - is classic. A great write and read I truly emjoyed.
November - the days of grays in my mind - you capture the cloudy interior here so well.
You've captured so much in this moment, senses can be quite acute at times of sorrow... loved the feeling a wonderful write...and read.
that last line carries a lot of weight. quite a powerful piece.
I felt like I have read a novel. Deep and intriguing.
Gorgeous! You leave so much to the imagination - so much here that is unsaid! This is really intriguing - love the sinister undertones at the end
Who is she and why is she so sad??? Living in melancholia...lol I need to buy you some flowers and build you a cozy fire!
Sad and strong. I ended reading the poem thinking of Spring though, so maybe the metaphor contains hope?
Ouch -- sad. Short, poignant, powerful writing. Thank you
Well that leaves an awful lot for us to wonder about... The poem none the worse for that, of course. Quite the reverse. The fascination extends beyond the last line.
Beautiful poem...thank you for using one of my pics!!
What an honor.
Hugs
SueAnn
reads beautifully. Great ending.
The end is indeed profound but I keep wondering why home is in quotes, very powerful.
perfect poem for the picture... well done!
The rest of this story...intriguing!
What a powerful ending... wasn't expecting that. I love when that happens!
November can be deceiving. It's the end all of life in a year's span. So, what or who else are dying! Nicely Jenny!
Hank
Wow - so much in your poem! I'm hanging on wanting more details!
poignant close.nicely done.evocative picture as well.
Death and tears in November, oh God, I feel my own poem being born. Thanks for the inspiration.
Great impact to the closing line..poignant and beautiful..thanks
I want more too - this poem made me remember going home from school in the autumn dusk when I was a sad teenager.......the final line really hits home......fantastic writing!
Very well written, beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
So beautiful, I always felt a sadness associated with November and all that we look forward to has perished, and once again face winter. A wonderful depiction!
Beautifully expressed sadness.
climactic, well done
November is a month that grays a person, perfect depiction of that heaviness and then that emotional kicker of an ending--well done! :-)
Thanks Brian! And thanks too for offering the prompt and bringing us the opportunity to use SueAnn's work.
Thank you Heaven.
Thanks for 'feeling' the piece Bren!
Thank you king, glad you enjoyed!
Thanks so much Janet--and SueAnn does great work doesn't she?
beautifully written and a perfect ending!
♥
I'm glad you think it makes a connection with readers, thanks Mary.
henry- thanks so much for your comment, a lovely compliment!
They are the 'days of gray' to me too...thanks Beachanny.
Thank you very much cat--I so appreciate your complimentary words on the piece.
Glad you found it so, thanks RMP!
Thank you very much Lisa.
marousia- thanks so much for enjoying the 'mystery'...a wonderful compliment, thank you.
You know who she is...and I'll take you up on the flowers and cozy fire!
Glad you brought it around to Spring p-d...after all Spring is always around the corner. Thanks for reading!
Thanks for feeling it Sabio, and commenting too.
The last two lines were the highlight for me. Beautiful writing. Great use of imagery.
Haunting!
Thanks Dave...glad it carries through! Thanks for reading.
It was an honor to be able to use your work SueAnn! I'm so glad you like the poem that came out of my musing on this beautiful piece. Thanks so much for sharing it, and for visiting me and commenting.
Thank you very much wolf.
Was wondering if anyone picked up on the quotes-- which are a piece to ponder in the write. Glad you came by rch--thanks for your comment!
Thank you very much Bing!
Glad you were intrigued Karen-thanks!
Glad you do Serena!
Your last line surprises and perfects the piece.
Sad and melancholy. A true November poem. We feel it in the gray and in the leaves. Thanks for posting.
So good I wished you had gone on to tell more...quite the photo for so many different responses...
Yes it can be deceiving! Thank you Hank.
Thanks Robyn-glad it grabbed you!
I love this picture of SueAnn's, really a great piece to write on. Thanks so much Abin.
You're welcome, can't wait to read it :)
Thank you Nilanjana.
Though sad in essence, I'm glad it was effective and made a connection with you. Thank you so much!
Thanks for reading and for your lovely comment Daisy.
I always feel it to...thank you very much Lisa!
Thank you Cressida.
Thanks Tatius.
Thank you very much Sara :)
Thanks for enjoying it!
Thanks for reading Rosemary.
Thanks Kim, very much.
Glad you think I captured it...thank you.
hmm...perhaps I will...it is a great photo, isn't it? Thanks for coming by and commenting on it!
Lovely. The surprise at the end made me gasp. The photo and words match marvelously.
Thanks Lori, so much!
Really exceptional - very delicate, as is all secret hurt. Beautifully and perfectly illustrated. Also, thanks for your kind remarks on my latest "launch".
Thank you Wendy, and I am looking forward to your new site :)
ah anytime...hope you had a great week as well...popped by to make sure i had not missed something...happy saturday!
I'm in LOVE with your way with words. Makes me want to go erase everything I've done and start over.... sigh. I've been touring the civil war battlegrounds now that I live in the south.... this reminds me of them.
Wow! You don't know what a compliment that is to me! I am a huge fan of your work. I so admire your style--don't change a thing. Your words have really made my day!
...and yours mine! :)
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