Thursday, November 15, 2012

Firegold



dusk
is a notion
of half-closed lids
in yellow flicks
of candlelight
against your bluegreen eyes
where
despite or because of
that lonely space between us
you pull me into
it
reaching for that tender
part you save for me
until i believe
i am the jewel
upon your hand
you always say i am
and melt like gold
in your palms



Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner



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64 comments:

  1. Dave KingNovember 16, 2012 at 4:59 AM

    despite or because of
    that lonely space between us
    you pull me into

    For me lines like this raise it to something a bit special.

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  2. BarbaraNovember 16, 2012 at 6:02 AM

    This left me breathless. So ,so good!

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  3. Brian MillerNovember 16, 2012 at 6:39 AM

    smiles...so warm and intimate....dusk is a time of magic...between the light and dark...and you add in a bit of the magic of love...wonderful write...happy friday

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  4. ClaudiaNovember 16, 2012 at 10:44 AM

    oh wow..this is just so beautifully intimate and so tender...i'm melting...smiles

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 17, 2012 at 12:11 PM

      smiles...thank you so much, such a lovely comment...

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  5. VictoriaNovember 16, 2012 at 4:11 PM

    Such a beautiful expression of a wonderful relationship. Love it!

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  6. Lisa WilliamsNovember 17, 2012 at 5:56 AM

    Lovely!

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  7. AnonymousNovember 17, 2012 at 7:33 AM

    i love the dusk and what a joy to read such a warming candlelit poem connected with it. thank you for sharing - and for your support. i've rarely visited blogs recently but going to read more now. i enjoy your poetry, truly~

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 17, 2012 at 12:14 PM

      Thank you so much...I enjoy your poetry as well...really consider you a fantastic talent. Keep it coming! Always look forward to your writes.

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  8. hyperCRYPTICalNovember 17, 2012 at 8:32 AM

    Your words are beautiful - love is a wonderful thing.

    Anna :o]

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  9. AnonymousNovember 18, 2012 at 1:37 AM

    I agree with Dave...the detail of that section is fantastic, shows the depth and non-clarity and possibility surrounding...well, maybe everything. Others said "intimate," and I agree with that, too.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 18, 2012 at 5:47 PM

      Thanks so much Jack. I really appreciate your thoughts, thanks for taking the time to leave them.

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  10. AnonymousNovember 18, 2012 at 2:15 AM

    a beautiful poem - especially how you have centered the piece around that single word line. Really works well. Thank you.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 18, 2012 at 5:48 PM

      Thanks wolf, that single word is how I felt it should be and wasn't sure it would come across how I felt it. Glad you thought it worked!

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  11. Abin ChakrabortyNovember 18, 2012 at 2:50 AM

    exquisitely beautiful.kind of poem that makes you fall in love with someone.

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  12. RashmiNovember 18, 2012 at 4:01 AM

    Beautiful words...
    the ethereal love, something special expressed so wonderfully...
    Enjoyed...

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 18, 2012 at 5:49 PM

      Rashmi, thanks for visiting and commenting on the piece--glad you enjoyed reading!

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  13. Kerry O'ConnorNovember 18, 2012 at 7:07 AM

    I just love those 3 opening lines..Whoosh! Beautiful poetry.

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  14. MaryNovember 18, 2012 at 7:36 AM

    Oh, this is just beautiful. "Until I believe I am a jewel in your hand" --- these words make my heart leap! Smiles.

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  15. Vinay Leo R.November 18, 2012 at 8:31 AM

    oh.. this brought in my mind a thought of the tree reaching for the sun, maybe in autumn coz of the melting gold. that of course, I mean other than the point of love, which is also brought out quite beautifully. Agree with Barbara, it leaves one breathless. :)

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  16. Sherry Blue SkyNovember 18, 2012 at 10:30 AM

    I love the title, and the idea, of firegold. I, too, really liked the lines that speak of the person being pulled into the space between them. Lovely.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 19, 2012 at 5:19 PM

      Sherry, I'm glad you liked those elements of the piece--always appreciate your thoughts so much.

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  17. Brother OllieNovember 18, 2012 at 10:47 AM

    Nice - I really love the style - nice and fresh.

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  18. WabiSabiNovember 18, 2012 at 12:58 PM

    Your 'lonely place between us' reminded me of Rilke's passage about relationship that ends with a reference to an 'immense sky' Really well drawn, Jennifer.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 19, 2012 at 5:21 PM

      What an honor to remind you of Rilke, I'm humbled.

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  19. ScottlBNovember 18, 2012 at 2:16 PM

    nice images here, nice title.

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  20. DaydreamertooNovember 18, 2012 at 5:32 PM

    So, so beautiful... the love and be loved like this is truly a gift.
    What a lovely poem Jennifer.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 19, 2012 at 5:22 PM

      It is a gift for sure Bren...glad you enjoyed, always appreciate your thoughts.

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  21. ayalaNovember 18, 2012 at 7:48 PM

    Warm...intimate and gorgeous !

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  22. MargaretNovember 18, 2012 at 9:16 PM

    This is a treasure of a poem - so romantically sweet. Your delivery, your poetic voice is perfect here.

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  23. Rosemary Nissen-WadeNovember 18, 2012 at 10:12 PM

    I love that it's all one sentence, flowing so easily. Beautiful words!

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  24. AnonymousNovember 19, 2012 at 4:46 AM

    Wonderfully written. I'm particularly drawn to "Until I believe I am a jewel in your hand..." which is beautiful.

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 19, 2012 at 5:28 PM

      Misky, I so appreciate your kind words on it. Thank you.

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  25. TankNovember 19, 2012 at 5:06 PM

    I love it! You've managed to capture this moment with such clarity and honesty. Dusk is a notion of half-closed lids in yellow flicks of candlelight - I wish I was there now...

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  26. AnonymousNovember 19, 2012 at 7:43 PM

    Very nice! I love how you pull it all together with the final word and a well-chosen title.
    Anne @ annelaura.com

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 19, 2012 at 11:46 PM

      Thanks for visiting Anne Laura and leaving such a nice comment!

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  27. EllaNovember 20, 2012 at 11:18 AM

    Beautiful! I love what you shared and the intimate dance of your words ;D

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    1. Jennifer WagnerNovember 21, 2012 at 8:42 PM

      I like that term "intimate dance"! Thanks Ella :-)

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  28. mrs mediocrityNovember 20, 2012 at 7:29 PM

    Just beautiful.

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  29. my heart's love songsNovember 22, 2012 at 11:20 PM

    from the title through the last stanza, absolutely beautiful!

    ♥

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  30. Anthony HopperNovember 26, 2012 at 1:06 PM

    Wonderful imagery!

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  31. Madeleine Begun KaneDecember 2, 2012 at 10:24 PM

    Lovely poem. You say so much with so few words!

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  32. Deepak KripalDecember 10, 2012 at 4:18 PM

    hey dear.. that was something.. really yaar.. exceptional piece of writing.. intense feelings, lovely lines, beautifully crafted..

    well written.. thumbs up

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  33. Buddah MoskowitzMay 2, 2016 at 1:41 PM

    This was like melted butter and chocolate. Warm and exquisite. Bravo!

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  34. Buddah MoskowitzMay 2, 2016 at 1:41 PM

    This was like melted butter and chocolate. Warm and exquisite. Bravo!

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