Thursday, November 15, 2012

Firegold



dusk
is a notion
of half-closed lids
in yellow flicks
of candlelight
against your bluegreen eyes
where
despite or because of
that lonely space between us
you pull me into
it
reaching for that tender
part you save for me
until i believe
i am the jewel
upon your hand
you always say i am
and melt like gold
in your palms



Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner



64 comments:

Dave King said...

despite or because of
that lonely space between us
you pull me into

For me lines like this raise it to something a bit special.

Barbara said...

This left me breathless. So ,so good!

Brian Miller said...

smiles...so warm and intimate....dusk is a time of magic...between the light and dark...and you add in a bit of the magic of love...wonderful write...happy friday

Claudia said...

oh wow..this is just so beautifully intimate and so tender...i'm melting...smiles

Victoria said...

Such a beautiful expression of a wonderful relationship. Love it!

Lisa Williams said...

Lovely!

Anonymous said...

i love the dusk and what a joy to read such a warming candlelit poem connected with it. thank you for sharing - and for your support. i've rarely visited blogs recently but going to read more now. i enjoy your poetry, truly~

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Your words are beautiful - love is a wonderful thing.

Anna :o]

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much Dave.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Barbara, thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Brian, such a great compliment.

Jennifer Wagner said...

smiles...thank you so much, such a lovely comment...

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much Victoria--glad you do.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you so much...I enjoy your poetry as well...really consider you a fantastic talent. Keep it coming! Always look forward to your writes.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Anna- thank you!! And I agree...

Anonymous said...

I agree with Dave...the detail of that section is fantastic, shows the depth and non-clarity and possibility surrounding...well, maybe everything. Others said "intimate," and I agree with that, too.

Anonymous said...

a beautiful poem - especially how you have centered the piece around that single word line. Really works well. Thank you.

Abin Chakraborty said...

exquisitely beautiful.kind of poem that makes you fall in love with someone.

Rashmi said...

Beautiful words...
the ethereal love, something special expressed so wonderfully...
Enjoyed...

Kerry O'Connor said...

I just love those 3 opening lines..Whoosh! Beautiful poetry.

Mary said...

Oh, this is just beautiful. "Until I believe I am a jewel in your hand" --- these words make my heart leap! Smiles.

Vinay Leo R. said...

oh.. this brought in my mind a thought of the tree reaching for the sun, maybe in autumn coz of the melting gold. that of course, I mean other than the point of love, which is also brought out quite beautifully. Agree with Barbara, it leaves one breathless. :)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the title, and the idea, of firegold. I, too, really liked the lines that speak of the person being pulled into the space between them. Lovely.

Brother Ollie said...

Nice - I really love the style - nice and fresh.

WabiSabi said...

Your 'lonely place between us' reminded me of Rilke's passage about relationship that ends with a reference to an 'immense sky' Really well drawn, Jennifer.

ScottlB said...

nice images here, nice title.

Daydreamertoo said...

So, so beautiful... the love and be loved like this is truly a gift.
What a lovely poem Jennifer.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much Jack. I really appreciate your thoughts, thanks for taking the time to leave them.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks wolf, that single word is how I felt it should be and wasn't sure it would come across how I felt it. Glad you thought it worked!

Jennifer Wagner said...

What a lovely compliment Abin, thank you so much.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Rashmi, thanks for visiting and commenting on the piece--glad you enjoyed reading!

ayala said...

Warm...intimate and gorgeous !

Margaret said...

This is a treasure of a poem - so romantically sweet. Your delivery, your poetic voice is perfect here.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I love that it's all one sentence, flowing so easily. Beautiful words!

Anonymous said...

Wonderfully written. I'm particularly drawn to "Until I believe I am a jewel in your hand..." which is beautiful.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you so much Kerry!

Jennifer Wagner said...

smiles...I'm glad they did, thanks Mary!

Tank said...

I love it! You've managed to capture this moment with such clarity and honesty. Dusk is a notion of half-closed lids in yellow flicks of candlelight - I wish I was there now...

Jennifer Wagner said...

Lovely images Leo, I appreciate your kind words.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Sherry, I'm glad you liked those elements of the piece--always appreciate your thoughts so much.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Ollie.

Jennifer Wagner said...

What an honor to remind you of Rilke, I'm humbled.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for reading and commenting T!

Jennifer Wagner said...

It is a gift for sure Bren...glad you enjoyed, always appreciate your thoughts.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Margaret, your comment means so much!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you liked it!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Misky, I so appreciate your kind words on it. Thank you.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I do too :D

Anonymous said...

Very nice! I love how you pull it all together with the final word and a well-chosen title.
Anne @ annelaura.com

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for visiting Anne Laura and leaving such a nice comment!

Ella said...

Beautiful! I love what you shared and the intimate dance of your words ;D

mrs mediocrity said...

Just beautiful.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I like that term "intimate dance"! Thanks Ella :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you :-)

my heart's love songs said...

from the title through the last stanza, absolutely beautiful!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you enjoyed it!

Anthony Hopper said...

Wonderful imagery!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Anthony!

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Lovely poem. You say so much with so few words!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Mad, glad you enjoyed!

Deepak Kripal said...

hey dear.. that was something.. really yaar.. exceptional piece of writing.. intense feelings, lovely lines, beautifully crafted..

well written.. thumbs up

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you deepak.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

This was like melted butter and chocolate. Warm and exquisite. Bravo!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

This was like melted butter and chocolate. Warm and exquisite. Bravo!