Tuesday, March 18, 2014

Lovers' Boats (Naked, Unashamed)


Fairyland – Sunita Khedekar


beez buzz
zap
            zapp
fizzle
fuzzle

guzzle
            nuzzle

the pleasant

swish
rattle
rustle

of cotton candy pink
feather and wing

and clothes

fling
-ing
and skin dip-
ping

into the splash, giggling

a sarcoline
memory quilting



© 2014 Jennifer Wagner


At dVerse Poetics Grace has invited us to write to the delightfully vibrant artwork of Sunita Khedekar.  She also encouraged us to use color words with the help of The Phrontistery.  The piece I chose to write to reminded me of a cabin we’ve stayed at a few times with a private outdoor hot tub in a beautiful natural settingtrees, creekjust picturesque.  We always chuckle at a sign they have posted there that reads, “We don’t skinny dip, we chunky dunk.”  Anyway, however you aremake a splash. ;)

28 comments:

Brian Miller said...

love.
the memory quilting is a great close
and i love the sounds....
and the freedom & excitement that comes with skinny dipping...ha...
fun piece.

Grace said...

I love the sounds guzzling & nuzzling ~ A lovely memory you have shared Jennifer ~ skinny dipping sounds so fun ~ Thanks for joining in, smiles ~

Anonymous said...

You did an excellent jpb there. Well done.
Yvonne.

Tank said...

What a fun write, love the beautiful imagery and smiles ;-)

ayala said...

A fun piece :)

Laurie Kolp said...

This is truly delightful, K...& I love "a sarcoline
memory quilting"...

Thank you so much for your prayers and offering of support during Mom's illness. It meant the world to me.

Mary said...

Oh, I really liked the word play here! Really enjoyable to think about the 'splash, giggling.'

Anonymous said...

How fun that you took the painting and heard its sounds! I especially enjoyed the finale.

Wendy Bourke said...

This is so fun, Jennifer: the words harmonizing with Sunita Khedekar's artwork, beautifully - and the onomatopoeia (hope I've got that right) whimsical and BANG on!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I think you mean J? lol ...hugs...

Anonymous said...

a great memory - I'm sure it always brings a shared smile.

colleen said...

Perfect. You had fun with this. It zings and pings and I love the patchwork quilt ending.

janetld said...

What can I say but that I agree this is a fizzle fuzzle FUN poem?!

Vandana Sharma said...

Very nice impact!

Heidi said...

So much fun! Your poem would also work for Brian's Blind Poet prompt. :)

Claudia said...

oh i love the sounds and the carefree feel of the poem.. just like a day with a loved one by the sea... very cool

Kathy Reed said...

The patchwork quilt is what I seem but your interpretation of the swimming was totally unexpected but very effective ;)

Anonymous said...

Well done for combining the sounds with the visuals... I agree it would have fitted with the Blind Poet prompt as well... light and fun too!

The Drugstore Notebook said...

A happy joyful splash indeed!!

Jeff said...

Lovely--the vivid verbs take this one straight to the senses. Excellent work!

brudberg said...

The sounds here are marvelous as are the end.. and I had to google sarcoline ... great closing.

Truedessa said...

I love the sounds as the words flow towards the big splash..

Margaret said...

Chunky dunk! Ha. This is so fun and bright - perfectly rendered.

lucychili said...

this capturess the lightfooted skipping into the water feeling

Sreeja said...

wow...so nice to read....lovely

Lisa A. Williams said...

What a lovely feeling I had while reading this.

enthusiastically, dawn said...

Wonderful fun, evokes memories of youthful days, and times of splashing... freely. Stories from a former life...

Maggie Grace said...

Lovely, light, fun to read. Great words to bring the image to life.