so
much depends
upon
the
spill of water
warm
in the basin
the
tumble-soft
tones
of Coltrane
from
another room
the
smooth glide
of
your hand
upon
my hip
so
much depends,
really,
on the
flip
of my
hair
Written
for Fireblossom Friday--taking the opening lines of William Carlos
Williams' poem The Red Wheelbarrow (“so much depends upon”) and
crafting our own poem.
Late
and linking to Poetry Pantry, too.
Happy
Valentine's Day!
29 comments:
Oh I love this Jennifer... Love how you brought Jazz into this.. and so great for Valentine..
Yum!
So much depends on everything happening at the right time, in the right way, and with the right one, indeed!
This is just a sassy, sexy on the prompt. Love it.
LOL, I love this. If things depended on the flip of my hair, I would be in a sorry state - I have never been able to control it, LOL.
De is so right this is sassy and sexy! Wonder if a pony tail elicits the same response???
So much depends on the mood of the moment...sensuality in small touches...
Very much in the spirit of Valentine's day! Great poem!
Ah, Jennifer==just a lovely poem. Terrific. Love that flip, and the smooth, flip tone. k.
You nailed it with the ending.
I like this...sweet sensuality!
Lovely...nailed it!
Love this! So sensual - and true. AND perfect for Valentine's Day.
lovely :)
very sensual, and playful too. enjoyed the poem. :)
this is a great take on the prompt.
Sweet & sensuous write :D
Oh wonderful! Love, love. Perfect.
You always capture real moments in a most poetic way!
Lovely writing for Valentine's day. :-)
I love it! Sultry and warm... Big smiles :) and I can never get enough Coltrane
This made me smile. It tumbles and slips with such smooth swag.
I love the seductive mood with the flip of the hair ~
Grace
the things a woman does to get her lover's attention. and you express them so well in your piece here. love your concise way of putting it too.
Great, Jennifer, and I so love "on the flip of my hair"!
Really sexy, romantic piece!
*giggle* As a busy mom I so get this. And how fabulous it can be when that hair flips just right.
Jennifer,
The mood of those moments very nicely enhanced by slick jazzy tones...Beautiful.
Eileen
Oh YES!
Coltrane, yes! one my favorites... I listened while I read and re-read your piece...beautiful.
ZQ
The details, the velocity of the action, it's all so much. Beautiful.
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