Sunday, February 14, 2016

(In the) Mood


so much depends
upon

the spill of water
warm in the basin

the tumble-soft
tones of Coltrane
from another room

the smooth glide
of your hand
upon my hip

so much depends,
really,

on the flip
of my hair


© 2016 Jennifer Wagner

Written for Fireblossom Friday--taking the opening lines of William Carlos Williams' poem The Red Wheelbarrow (“so much depends upon”) and crafting our own poem.

Late and linking to Poetry Pantry, too.

Happy Valentine's Day!



29 comments:

brudberg said...

Oh I love this Jennifer... Love how you brought Jazz into this.. and so great for Valentine..

Magaly Guerrero said...

Yum!

So much depends on everything happening at the right time, in the right way, and with the right one, indeed!

De Jackson said...

This is just a sassy, sexy on the prompt. Love it.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

LOL, I love this. If things depended on the flip of my hair, I would be in a sorry state - I have never been able to control it, LOL.

Helen said...

De is so right this is sassy and sexy! Wonder if a pony tail elicits the same response???

Truedessa said...

So much depends on the mood of the moment...sensuality in small touches...

Hannah said...

Very much in the spirit of Valentine's day! Great poem!

Outlawyer said...

Ah, Jennifer==just a lovely poem. Terrific. Love that flip, and the smooth, flip tone. k.

Anonymous said...

You nailed it with the ending.

Mary said...

I like this...sweet sensuality!

Anonymous said...

Lovely...nailed it!

Wendy Bourke said...

Love this! So sensual - and true. AND perfect for Valentine's Day.

Sumana Roy said...

lovely :)

dsnake1 said...

very sensual, and playful too. enjoyed the poem. :)
this is a great take on the prompt.

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Sweet & sensuous write :D

Marian said...

Oh wonderful! Love, love. Perfect.

Margaret said...

You always capture real moments in a most poetic way!

Paul Andrew Russell said...

Lovely writing for Valentine's day. :-)

Tank said...

I love it! Sultry and warm... Big smiles :) and I can never get enough Coltrane

colleen said...

This made me smile. It tumbles and slips with such smooth swag.

Scarlet said...

I love the seductive mood with the flip of the hair ~

Grace

Nicholas said...

the things a woman does to get her lover's attention. and you express them so well in your piece here. love your concise way of putting it too.

janetld said...

Great, Jennifer, and I so love "on the flip of my hair"!

Maude Lynn said...

Really sexy, romantic piece!

Rommy said...

*giggle* As a busy mom I so get this. And how fabulous it can be when that hair flips just right.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Jennifer,

The mood of those moments very nicely enhanced by slick jazzy tones...Beautiful.

Eileen

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh YES!

ZQ said...

Coltrane, yes! one my favorites... I listened while I read and re-read your piece...beautiful.
ZQ

Buddah Moskowitz said...

The details, the velocity of the action, it's all so much. Beautiful.