so
much depends
upon
the
spill of water
warm
in the basin
the
tumble-soft
tones
of Coltrane
from
another room
the
smooth glide
of
your hand
upon
my hip
so
much depends,
really,
on the
flip
of my
hair
Written
for Fireblossom Friday--taking the opening lines of William Carlos
Williams' poem The Red Wheelbarrow (“so much depends upon”) and
crafting our own poem.
Late
and linking to Poetry Pantry, too.
Happy
Valentine's Day!
Oh I love this Jennifer... Love how you brought Jazz into this.. and so great for Valentine..
ReplyDeleteYum!
ReplyDeleteSo much depends on everything happening at the right time, in the right way, and with the right one, indeed!
This is just a sassy, sexy on the prompt. Love it.
ReplyDeleteLOL, I love this. If things depended on the flip of my hair, I would be in a sorry state - I have never been able to control it, LOL.
ReplyDeleteDe is so right this is sassy and sexy! Wonder if a pony tail elicits the same response???
ReplyDeleteSo much depends on the mood of the moment...sensuality in small touches...
ReplyDeleteVery much in the spirit of Valentine's day! Great poem!
ReplyDeleteAh, Jennifer==just a lovely poem. Terrific. Love that flip, and the smooth, flip tone. k.
ReplyDeleteYou nailed it with the ending.
ReplyDeleteI like this...sweet sensuality!
ReplyDeleteLovely...nailed it!
ReplyDeleteLove this! So sensual - and true. AND perfect for Valentine's Day.
ReplyDeletelovely :)
ReplyDeletevery sensual, and playful too. enjoyed the poem. :)
ReplyDeletethis is a great take on the prompt.
Sweet & sensuous write :D
ReplyDeleteOh wonderful! Love, love. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteYou always capture real moments in a most poetic way!
ReplyDeleteLovely writing for Valentine's day. :-)
ReplyDeleteI love it! Sultry and warm... Big smiles :) and I can never get enough Coltrane
ReplyDeleteThis made me smile. It tumbles and slips with such smooth swag.
ReplyDeleteI love the seductive mood with the flip of the hair ~
ReplyDeleteGrace
the things a woman does to get her lover's attention. and you express them so well in your piece here. love your concise way of putting it too.
ReplyDeleteGreat, Jennifer, and I so love "on the flip of my hair"!
ReplyDeleteReally sexy, romantic piece!
ReplyDelete*giggle* As a busy mom I so get this. And how fabulous it can be when that hair flips just right.
ReplyDeleteJennifer,
ReplyDeleteThe mood of those moments very nicely enhanced by slick jazzy tones...Beautiful.
Eileen
Oh YES!
ReplyDeleteColtrane, yes! one my favorites... I listened while I read and re-read your piece...beautiful.
ReplyDeleteZQ
The details, the velocity of the action, it's all so much. Beautiful.
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