Saturday, August 17, 2013

Electric


© 2013 Jennifer Wagner



I searched and searched
for the sun, but could not find it.

So I traveled east to where your arms
grew soft against mine, softer.

The full bloom scent of electric blue
burst within the wild

to chase that dark day wisp of cloud to white—
white like night when just past black,

and into new day dawning
to find and enter that centered

rose of sun,
asking where I’ve been.



© 2013 Jennifer Wagner


35 comments:

The Unknowngnome said...

A beautiful homecoming!

Wendy Bourke said...

Moody blue and dreamy. With little bolts of alliteration and bits of random rhyme that crackle with electricity. A lovely piece of poetry!

Panchali said...

That was enlightening...so beautiful :)

Anonymous said...

Beautiful - flowed like a song - or a river - very nice.

Anne V said...

Loved this line: The full bloom scent of electric blue
burst within the wild.

Such beautiful mystique in the chasing of dawn as part of a homecoming. Love it. :)

rallentanda said...

Beautiful imagery captured in this poem by stunning well chosen words!

Vandana Sharma said...

enchanting!!

Mary said...

This is lovely, Jennifer. That last stanza made my heart skip a beat.

Fireblossom said...

"white like night when just past black," That just sounds so cool I really like this, especially the ending.

Brian Miller said...

nice....love the rose of the sun...and the rather prodigal feel of this...the warm homecoming lets us know we were missed...nicely done j

Grace said...

Love that rose of the sun ~ Heartfelt & electric write ~

NataĊĦek said...

stunning... very beautiful.. love the flow of it.

Lisa A. Williams said...

So tranquil, smooth as silk. Just loved this Jennifer.

TALON said...

There's a softness, tinged with melancholy, that just is beautiful to read.

Gabriella said...

I like how you combine colours in this very powerful poem! And the photo is a wonderful illustration.

Anonymous said...

A very lovely poem. I like the descriptive colours.

Anonymous said...

Beautiful and succinctly told. I just love that in a poem!

Sherri B. said...

So visual and stunning...lovely!

Scott Matthews said...

Bliss awaits us where we seek it, as at the center of a rose sun! Wonderful read!

Anand S Unni said...

Splendid.!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

There is a calm in this little electric piece and I love that juxtaposition. Beautiful write Jennifer!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I loved this, it reads wonderfully, with some way cool lines. Love the electric blue photo too. Glorious.

Sarav said...

Jennifer, I loved this so much I read it a few times just to feel those words and enjoy the images. Traveled east where your arms grew soft... Loved that and enter the centered rose of the sun. Wonderful!!

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Jennifer,

A beautiful romantic hue is running throughout your words...Perhaps set to music this might be a theme for a film!!

Eileen

Preeti S. said...

"white like night when just past black"

Wow. That gave off a feeling that was peaceful and soothing, like the calm and silence of a night when you are travelling on foot. Beautiful dream-like quality too. Loved this. Keep it up!

Gemma Wiseman said...

Like a romantic river song of love. Beautiful flow.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Beautiful, lovely, beautiful, lovely - I could say this forever!
Anna :o]

Kerry O'Connor said...

I really love this poem - the two opening stanzas use contrast so effectively and set the reader up for the remainder of the poem.

Sumana Roy said...


love the chase for light.......

RMP said...

lovely. there was an interesting calm hidden in this electric piece...probably has to do with the arms stanza; I liked the ending.

Rajesh said...

"Rose of the sun", who can ever write like that! Beautiful mystical lines.

Anonymous said...

Sweet and magical. :-)

Mademoiselle Modelle said...

Totally in love with the scent of electric blue!

janetld said...

Ditto about the scent of electric blue.

Lovely work, always.

Anonymous said...

That 'softer' at the end of line 4 is just perfect.