Flies tried to stay cool, too
in the sweltering fisheye
view
of Mariscos Mazatlan.
A little girl, a bloodshot
hibiscus in her hair,
young men, brown
shouldered in thin white tanks, and
the humming Spanish
vernacular
making me tone deaf
with ringing, pounding
against my—
I don’t know what I felt
more
the heat between my
thighs
or your stare,
affecting nonchalance,
sipping ice water
sprinkled with a lime
meant for two.
Copyright © 2013 Jennifer
Wagner
51 comments:
whew... i think i need to sip some ice water to cool down a bit...nice bit of heat in this.. hmmm...great intensity to this
Well...tell me my inner prude hasn't rolled over again...the heat kind of sneaks up on you...smart and steamy!
Great passion in this. Nice one.
oh my....Jennifer, this is so intense indeed, muchly enjoyed.....
hmm..i have a sudden urge for ice water sprinkled with a lime :-)
Hot..hot..hot. Nice ;)
I was gonna say the same thing: H.O.T.
Must have been some night... this is great!
Wonderful sensory description Jennifer. I agree with the thoughts expressed above! This was powerfully written.
oh dang...that last stanza got really hot....oo la la....you did really well building the scene and then bringing us into your feeling...ha...ice water any one...smiles.
Must have been a special and memorable night ~ The subtle heat in the last stanza was a nice touch ~
Beautiful... Second stanza especially - breathtaking! Great poetry Jennifer - makes me hungry tor ead more of your work - Regards Scott www.scotthastie.com
Yeah Wow! wonderfully written.
There is something about those HOT nights in Mexico... nice!
wow...i need to go get some sweet tea and cool down.
Very sensual in the interplay (skillfully done) of many senses - building the scene, as the heat rises.
wow! quite intense...........
Holidays in the sun are often spent in darkness...
I love the way you build the scene and then suddenly focus on your response to becoming the focus of another person's attention.
yes, that was sexy and seen in the hot sun...great.
Oh well, you know what they say... what happens in Cabo stays in Cabo! They do say that, don't they? ;-)
I don't have many must-read blogs, but this is one of them.
This transported me...
Jennifer, what a scene, so colorful and Hot! Bloodshot hibiscus caught me --they do look like that the way the color runs in the veins--excellent!:-)
Passionate and intense..Whoa!!
The sensory details describe this beautifully, Jennifer. It unwinds flawlessly, you can feel the heaviness in it. Great write. :)
lime?
ha...'inner prude' LOL
Thanks Yelena :-)
There was no air conditioning too...
'Twas...thanks Laurie!
Thank you very much David!
Ha :-) Thanks Brian!
Thank you Grace...
I really appreciate that Scott, thank you!
Thanks Di!
...smiles...thanks Mary!
mmm...sweet tea...
Thank you Wendy :)
Not if you keep the lights on.
Thank you for reading Tony, I appreciate your words!
Thanks Tracy, nice to meet you :)
Wow, Shay. I'm super honored, you knock it out of the park with your writing so this is such a compliment to me.
Someplace good I hope...
Thank you very much Mrs. Cracker Jack poet! :-)
...nelly! Thanks for commenting odyzz, I appreciate it.
Thank you so much Heather. I always appreciate your comments on my writing...so thoughtful...you are going to rock the world of psychotherapy!
Sensual and sensuous, this buzzes with a sense of time and place.
Thank you very much DJ. I really appreciate your visit.
"bloodshot hibiscus in her hair," beautiful line!
Such beautiful work. Never fails...you truly touch each reader.
Glad you think so Laura :)
Thanks so much Keith :)
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