i come
swept into
the tidal wave of you
mashed up
on this ocean floor
how do you undo me
like this
my gift
in a dizzy hand
my eyes
a vulnerable sigh, a sail
on the blue
of this paper world, folded
into the perpetual
burning
churning
the wheel of us
together,
marooned
Ah, a poem with deep feelings of love! Nicely sensual!
ReplyDeleteWow Jennifer, what a gorgeous poem of passion! I love how you always write with such perfect brevity. That takes a certain talent most writers do not have
ReplyDeleteWater, like air, (and like the planet entire) always in motion, and us with it. Sometimes we find a solid hand-hold, someone we connect with, but they, and we, are in perpetual motion too. It can be a wild ride.
ReplyDeleteSo delicate and yet so full - a wonderful poem - Jae
ReplyDeleteI love the way this poem swirled down the page with so much movement, building to the excellent closing lines,"together, marooned."
ReplyDeleteAn exquisite sensual experience, I love it.
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful, I agree with Sherry. She described this poem so much better than I can put into words.
ReplyDeleteOoooh! Nice! A tsunami of the one we love. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteSinuous and sensual, and yet if not reserved, somehow distant ~
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