The rain like silver
sky
fish scales falling
here
at midnight, like I am,
into
you, waiting.
The
moon, fragrant, white,
blossoming,
solitary.
©
2017 Jennifer Wagner
A twist on the sedoka (two katautas with 5-5-7 instead of 5-7-7 syllable counts) for OpenLinkNight.
21 comments:
This is gorgeous, Jennifer. "The moon, fragrant, white...". Just lovely!
Love the waiting and that fragrant moon~ Nice twist to the form Jennifer ~
Hot! I understand that there is a place
in poetry for that :)
Well done!
ZQ
This is something that I rarely see... moon is shy when days are long. Love the scent anyway, yesterday evening the world was honeysuckle
Your poem begs to be sniffed! I love it, especially that fragrant moon!
Gorgeous! If it has moons and silver fish in it, I'll love it :)
Great write. Moonlight and rain, where better to wait.
Two beautiful linked images, love the falling fish scale rain and the solitary moon.
Beautiful work. I especially like that first line break, making the rain itself silver, which of course, it is, when it seems to fall in sheets.
Love the fragrance that you've imbued the moon with. A wonderful little piece - as soft and white as the glow from a lantern moon.
Expressed as a true romantic.
Ooooh I like this form. I want to try it. Yours so beautiful, taking traditional pieces and tying them together - the simplicity expanding like a Japanese Garden and I can view it from the bridge. Lovely.
The rain like silver
sky fish scales falling
here at midnight
Quite a spectacle to see in the darkness! Great word craft Jennifer!
Hank
Brilliant form and one that speaks to the soul. Greetings to you!
*cocks head* I have to think about that blossoming solitary moon.
This is beautiful. I like: sky fish scales falling
here at midnight, like I am,
into you, waiting.
wonderful lines!
Sascha Darlington
I agree: a beautiful little poem!
This gave me chills! Love the images you created.
How indeed does the moon work its magic? Loved this.
You've captivated me here!
Awesome blog, i always enjoy & read the post you are sharing!
Thank for your very good article...!
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