Thursday, June 15, 2017

Carry the Moon to Me


The rain like silver
sky fish scales falling
here at midnight, like I am,

into you, waiting.
The moon, fragrant, white,
blossoming, solitary.


© 2017 Jennifer Wagner


A twist on the sedoka (two katautas with 5-5-7 instead of 5-7-7 syllable counts) for OpenLinkNight.

21 comments:

Sarah Russell said...

This is gorgeous, Jennifer. "The moon, fragrant, white...". Just lovely!

Grace said...

Love the waiting and that fragrant moon~ Nice twist to the form Jennifer ~

ZQ said...

Hot! I understand that there is a place
in poetry for that :)
Well done!
ZQ

brudberg said...

This is something that I rarely see... moon is shy when days are long. Love the scent anyway, yesterday evening the world was honeysuckle

dianadevlin said...

Your poem begs to be sniffed! I love it, especially that fragrant moon!

Jane Dougherty said...

Gorgeous! If it has moons and silver fish in it, I'll love it :)

indybev said...

Great write. Moonlight and rain, where better to wait.

Nosaint said...

Two beautiful linked images, love the falling fish scale rain and the solitary moon.

said...

Beautiful work. I especially like that first line break, making the rain itself silver, which of course, it is, when it seems to fall in sheets.

Wendy Bourke said...

Love the fragrance that you've imbued the moon with. A wonderful little piece - as soft and white as the glow from a lantern moon.

Anonymous said...

Expressed as a true romantic.

Beachanny said...

Ooooh I like this form. I want to try it. Yours so beautiful, taking traditional pieces and tying them together - the simplicity expanding like a Japanese Garden and I can view it from the bridge. Lovely.

kaykuala said...

The rain like silver
sky fish scales falling
here at midnight

Quite a spectacle to see in the darkness! Great word craft Jennifer!

Hank

Blogoratti said...

Brilliant form and one that speaks to the soul. Greetings to you!

Fireblossom said...

*cocks head* I have to think about that blossoming solitary moon.

Unknown said...

This is beautiful. I like: sky fish scales falling
here at midnight, like I am,
into you, waiting.
wonderful lines!

Sascha Darlington

janetld said...

I agree: a beautiful little poem!

Sandy said...

This gave me chills! Love the images you created.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

How indeed does the moon work its magic? Loved this.

janetld said...

You've captivated me here!

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