The rain like silver
sky
fish scales falling
here
at midnight, like I am,
into
you, waiting.
The
moon, fragrant, white,
blossoming,
solitary.
©
2017 Jennifer Wagner
A twist on the sedoka (two katautas with 5-5-7 instead of 5-7-7 syllable counts) for OpenLinkNight.
This is gorgeous, Jennifer. "The moon, fragrant, white...". Just lovely!
ReplyDeleteLove the waiting and that fragrant moon~ Nice twist to the form Jennifer ~
ReplyDeleteHot! I understand that there is a place
ReplyDeletein poetry for that :)
Well done!
ZQ
This is something that I rarely see... moon is shy when days are long. Love the scent anyway, yesterday evening the world was honeysuckle
ReplyDeleteYour poem begs to be sniffed! I love it, especially that fragrant moon!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous! If it has moons and silver fish in it, I'll love it :)
ReplyDeleteGreat write. Moonlight and rain, where better to wait.
ReplyDeleteTwo beautiful linked images, love the falling fish scale rain and the solitary moon.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work. I especially like that first line break, making the rain itself silver, which of course, it is, when it seems to fall in sheets.
ReplyDeleteLove the fragrance that you've imbued the moon with. A wonderful little piece - as soft and white as the glow from a lantern moon.
ReplyDeleteExpressed as a true romantic.
ReplyDeleteOoooh I like this form. I want to try it. Yours so beautiful, taking traditional pieces and tying them together - the simplicity expanding like a Japanese Garden and I can view it from the bridge. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThe rain like silver
ReplyDeletesky fish scales falling
here at midnight
Quite a spectacle to see in the darkness! Great word craft Jennifer!
Hank
Brilliant form and one that speaks to the soul. Greetings to you!
ReplyDelete*cocks head* I have to think about that blossoming solitary moon.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I like: sky fish scales falling
ReplyDeletehere at midnight, like I am,
into you, waiting.
wonderful lines!
Sascha Darlington
I agree: a beautiful little poem!
ReplyDeleteThis gave me chills! Love the images you created.
ReplyDeleteHow indeed does the moon work its magic? Loved this.
ReplyDeleteYou've captivated me here!
ReplyDeleteAwesome blog, i always enjoy & read the post you are sharing!
ReplyDeleteThank for your very good article...!
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