Thursday, June 15, 2017

Carry the Moon to Me


The rain like silver
sky fish scales falling
here at midnight, like I am,

into you, waiting.
The moon, fragrant, white,
blossoming, solitary.


© 2017 Jennifer Wagner


A twist on the sedoka (two katautas with 5-5-7 instead of 5-7-7 syllable counts) for OpenLinkNight.

21 comments:

  1. This is gorgeous, Jennifer. "The moon, fragrant, white...". Just lovely!

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  2. Love the waiting and that fragrant moon~ Nice twist to the form Jennifer ~

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  3. Hot! I understand that there is a place
    in poetry for that :)
    Well done!
    ZQ

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  4. This is something that I rarely see... moon is shy when days are long. Love the scent anyway, yesterday evening the world was honeysuckle

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  5. Your poem begs to be sniffed! I love it, especially that fragrant moon!

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  6. Gorgeous! If it has moons and silver fish in it, I'll love it :)

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  7. Great write. Moonlight and rain, where better to wait.

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  8. Two beautiful linked images, love the falling fish scale rain and the solitary moon.

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  9. Beautiful work. I especially like that first line break, making the rain itself silver, which of course, it is, when it seems to fall in sheets.

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  10. Love the fragrance that you've imbued the moon with. A wonderful little piece - as soft and white as the glow from a lantern moon.

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  11. Ooooh I like this form. I want to try it. Yours so beautiful, taking traditional pieces and tying them together - the simplicity expanding like a Japanese Garden and I can view it from the bridge. Lovely.

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  12. The rain like silver
    sky fish scales falling
    here at midnight

    Quite a spectacle to see in the darkness! Great word craft Jennifer!

    Hank

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  13. Brilliant form and one that speaks to the soul. Greetings to you!

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  14. *cocks head* I have to think about that blossoming solitary moon.

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  15. This is beautiful. I like: sky fish scales falling
    here at midnight, like I am,
    into you, waiting.
    wonderful lines!

    Sascha Darlington

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  16. I agree: a beautiful little poem!

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  17. This gave me chills! Love the images you created.

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  18. How indeed does the moon work its magic? Loved this.

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  19. Awesome blog, i always enjoy & read the post you are sharing!
    Thank for your very good article...!

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