Hedge the rows
where the birdnote
grows,
lark a tune
‘neath the fiddlehead
moon,
tip the wine glass,
burn the firegrass,
bellow and croak
at the midnight
stroke,
thatch the stormroof,
squall and rainproofed—
and all the other
rhymes and metaphors
it takes to build and
protect
something worth
something.
© 2014 Jennifer
Wagner
*title taken from
Song of Solomon 2:15
sharing with dVerse
at OLN
20 comments:
ha. i liked the rhyme you had going...and then how you addressed it directly...can we protect something with just our fancy words...i wonder.....
Ha.. rhymes pretty much ties it all together to something safe... wonder if it's but an illusion ...
protecting our love...i like that... and cool nod to the song of solomon as well...small foxes can spoil the vineyard...yep
I enjoyed the short lines and the ending rhymes. Your word choices add a nice visual to the piece. The ending stanza stands out nicely, producing a solid ending "to build and protect something worth something."
I love that last little stanza. You've built "something worth something" here.
Wonderful Jennifer. I really enjoyed reading this.
This is delightful!
Rhymes and metaphors - what would we do without them!! Enjoyed this!
Lovely scene! I like the idea of tipping the wine glass 'at the midnight stroke'.
The rhyming verses are excellent ~ I think protecting the home & hearth are most important ~
Reads like a timeless spell.
Delightful :)
I love the rhyming here. The end is superb. Protect what's worth something.
Enjoyed.
Beautiful. Some indelible lines here, Jennifer. The kind of verse that really sticks with one.
I love the image of a "fiddlehead moon," it sounds like spring.
Like the subject matter too. Anything built and labored on certainly deserves protecting.
I like the tune, and the serious turn at the close, Jennifer :) ~
Loving that last stanza. Great write.
It has a beautiful rhythmic flow.
Ha, lovely rhyme and rhythm - it's beguiling like an incantation... for spring perhaps?
So true, chickadee.
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