Friday, August 17, 2012

Composing


through table legs
painted toenails coquet
the edge of denim


lemon, sea salt
and baby arugula
eaten with fingertips


candlelight flutter
a catch in her breath
traced in his own


sicilian jazz
the subtle intensity
composing their story



Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner

33 comments:

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Composing a story is both serious and lighthearted business. It seems to me that you have a little of both here--just the right balance.

Helpless Soul

Fran aka Redondowriter said...

Poet laundry, you pulled off a very sensuous story with your haikus. I shiver with memories as I read it.

Wendy Bourke said...

You've composed a lovely, almost whimsical, picture with words that leave a really pleasant feel good echo.

Fallingladies said...

Creates a lovely small joy scenario in my head!

rebecca said...

welcome jennifer to haiku my heart!
you have entered with a passion all heated up in your provocative haiku. lovely...each vignette, a delicious morsel of love!
i hope you will return again and again. in fact, please, never stop!

Lea said...

So lovely! My favorite line... "the catch in her breath traced in his own..." evocative, sensual, a feast for all the senses! Thank you!

carol l mckenna said...

Lovely romanic series of haiku ~ well penned ~ Thanks for coming by (A Creative Harbor)

foxysue said...

I'm hooked, tell me more, you've whetted my taste-buds! x

Brian Miller said...

very cool...i love how the little snippets totally build the scene....that third one is my fav...but the last def sets a mood too...smiles.

Unknown said...

oh this telling of such an intimate tale in so few...beautiful words!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for saying so Magical!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad I could bring back enjoyable memories for you! Thank you very much for commenting Fran.

Jennifer Wagner said...

...pleasant feel good echo...I like that! Thanks Doodles!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm glad it does :) Thanks for visiting!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Rebecca, thank you very much for such a bright welcome! Thanks too for your compliment on my haiku set. I do plan to return to your wonderful site.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Lea- thank you very much! I so appreciate your kind words!

Jennifer Wagner said...

I so appreciate your visit and your complimentary comment--thanks for following too! :-D

Jennifer Wagner said...

Haha! You may have just inspired me...Glad to have you come by foxysue--hope you return! :)

Victoria said...

Lovely images of a wonderful moment. Love your haiku.

colleen said...

I got a little drunk on those words.

Arnoldo L. Romero, MLA said...

Nice!

anthonynorth said...

You build a great scene here.

mrs mediocrity said...

lovely.... the candlelight stanza is my favorite

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks Brian, glad you enjoyed that one :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks very much Stephanie--I appreciate your visit!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Kind of you to comment Victoria--thanks so much!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Haha! Glad you found it intoxicating colleen :D

Jennifer Wagner said...

Appreciate your kind comment, thank you :)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you like it mrs--thank you so much for saying so :)

Lori Lipsky said...

Quite lovely, PL. I can picture the scene.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Lovely haiku!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much Lori!

Jennifer Wagner said...

Happy you found it so Mad-thanks for commenting :)