through table legs
painted toenails coquet
the edge of denim
lemon, sea salt
and baby arugula
eaten with fingertips
a catch in her breath
traced in his own
the subtle intensity
composing their story
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner
Linked to haiku my heart forever
Composing a story is both serious and lighthearted business. It seems to me that you have a little of both here--just the right balance.
Poet laundry, you pulled off a very sensuous story with your haikus. I shiver with memories as I read it.
You've composed a lovely, almost whimsical, picture with words that leave a really pleasant feel good echo.
Creates a lovely small joy scenario in my head!
welcome jennifer to haiku my heart!
you have entered with a passion all heated up in your provocative haiku. lovely...each vignette, a delicious morsel of love!
i hope you will return again and again. in fact, please, never stop!
So lovely! My favorite line... "the catch in her breath traced in his own..." evocative, sensual, a feast for all the senses! Thank you!
Lovely romanic series of haiku ~ well penned ~ Thanks for coming by (A Creative Harbor)
I'm hooked, tell me more, you've whetted my taste-buds! x
very cool...i love how the little snippets totally build the scene....that third one is my fav...but the last def sets a mood too...smiles.
oh this telling of such an intimate tale in so few...beautiful words!
Thanks for saying so Magical!
Glad I could bring back enjoyable memories for you! Thank you very much for commenting Fran.
...pleasant feel good echo...I like that! Thanks Doodles!
I'm glad it does :) Thanks for visiting!
Rebecca, thank you very much for such a bright welcome! Thanks too for your compliment on my haiku set. I do plan to return to your wonderful site.
Lea- thank you very much! I so appreciate your kind words!
I so appreciate your visit and your complimentary comment--thanks for following too! :-D
Haha! You may have just inspired me...Glad to have you come by foxysue--hope you return! :)
Lovely images of a wonderful moment. Love your haiku.
I got a little drunk on those words.
You build a great scene here.
lovely.... the candlelight stanza is my favorite
Thanks Brian, glad you enjoyed that one :)
Thanks very much Stephanie--I appreciate your visit!
Kind of you to comment Victoria--thanks so much!
Haha! Glad you found it intoxicating colleen :D
Appreciate your kind comment, thank you :)
Glad you like it mrs--thank you so much for saying so :)
Quite lovely, PL. I can picture the scene.
Thanks so much Lori!
Happy you found it so Mad-thanks for commenting :)
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