Friday, August 17, 2012

Composing


through table legs
painted toenails coquet
the edge of denim


lemon, sea salt
and baby arugula
eaten with fingertips


candlelight flutter
a catch in her breath
traced in his own


sicilian jazz
the subtle intensity
composing their story



Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner

34 comments:

  1. Composing a story is both serious and lighthearted business. It seems to me that you have a little of both here--just the right balance.

    Helpless Soul

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  2. Poet laundry, you pulled off a very sensuous story with your haikus. I shiver with memories as I read it.

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    1. Glad I could bring back enjoyable memories for you! Thank you very much for commenting Fran.

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  3. You've composed a lovely, almost whimsical, picture with words that leave a really pleasant feel good echo.

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    1. ...pleasant feel good echo...I like that! Thanks Doodles!

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  4. Creates a lovely small joy scenario in my head!

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  5. welcome jennifer to haiku my heart!
    you have entered with a passion all heated up in your provocative haiku. lovely...each vignette, a delicious morsel of love!
    i hope you will return again and again. in fact, please, never stop!

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    1. Rebecca, thank you very much for such a bright welcome! Thanks too for your compliment on my haiku set. I do plan to return to your wonderful site.

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  6. So lovely! My favorite line... "the catch in her breath traced in his own..." evocative, sensual, a feast for all the senses! Thank you!

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    1. Lea- thank you very much! I so appreciate your kind words!

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  7. Lovely romanic series of haiku ~ well penned ~ Thanks for coming by (A Creative Harbor)

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    1. I so appreciate your visit and your complimentary comment--thanks for following too! :-D

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  8. I'm hooked, tell me more, you've whetted my taste-buds! x

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    1. Haha! You may have just inspired me...Glad to have you come by foxysue--hope you return! :)

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  9. very cool...i love how the little snippets totally build the scene....that third one is my fav...but the last def sets a mood too...smiles.

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  10. oh this telling of such an intimate tale in so few...beautiful words!

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    1. Thanks very much Stephanie--I appreciate your visit!

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  11. Lovely images of a wonderful moment. Love your haiku.

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  12. I got a little drunk on those words.

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  13. lovely.... the candlelight stanza is my favorite

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    1. Glad you like it mrs--thank you so much for saying so :)

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  14. Quite lovely, PL. I can picture the scene.

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    1. Happy you found it so Mad-thanks for commenting :)

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