I held you in my hands,
cupped you to my face,
drenched myself in your flood,
and hid tears in your presence
as
a secret we shared.
Your music put me to sleep
and drowned the echo of sorrows
in long nights you rocked me,
showering drops against the pane
—were
you begging to be let in?
When you stayed until the morning
washing and making things new,
I’d wake and sing my insensitive
song,
frowning, I’d begin…
“Rain, rain go
away…"
Even then you would sigh,
contentedly, from heaven;
peering sheepishly from behind
clouds
as I wiped the sugars off my
mouth
from
the fruits that were your labor.
Never did you seek applause of
me,
always willing to play sidekick,
straight man, to our comedic sun
while I laughed among flowered
mornings
that without you
would
never have been quite so sweet.
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner
26 comments:
I like it!
I love the way you have captured the many emotions that a gentle rain evokes. There is nothing I like more than hearing the sound of drops against the roof while I prepare to sleep. Thanks for sharing :)
You have captured some of the emotions I feel with rain. Being a water sign (Cancer) I love it, in all of its many forms. But I do love to hear its pitter patter on windows and feel it falling soft on me too.
This was such a lovely read.
ayala- thank you! :)
Thanks for saying so Nonnymonster :)
I do like that too PhotoDiction...quite comforting. Thank you for your comment!
I appreciate you visiting my blog Daydreamertoo...and your comment! I'm glad you connected with this piece :)
lovely poem and excellent format.sweet and sensitive.
Beautiful, Poet Laundry. And right now, midst the drought we have here where I live in Wisconsin, rain seems more precious than ever.
Rain, rain, please come.
there's so much soothing power in the rain...love how you personify him...peering sheepishly from behind clouds
as I wiped the sugars off my mouth
from the fruits that were your labor...hmmm..this is deep and sweet and i almost wish for a bit of rain now...smiles
You make me smile! Looking out of our front window to a dreary, wet, overcast day again will never be the same :)
...very kind of you to comment Abin...appreciate your words!
I'd sure send some if I could :) Thanks Lori!
you brought the rain alive...i love to listen to its music...the music changes as well with my mood....seeing him peek around made me smile.....
I like how the rain starts of almost as a lover. Great way to look at the rain :)
being a Libra, ruled by Venus, the romance here was incredible....I felt the love and devotion - rain personified.....loved it all
The rain indeed can be so soothing. I so value your comments Claudia--thank you for them!
You make me smile too :-D Glad this poem had that effect!
Brian--glad to make you smile! I know what you mean about the rain being a differing symphony depending on my mood. Great thoughts!
I like how you saw that aspect in this piece. Thanks for commenting Dandelion Girl :)
Thank you very much joanne...I'm honored you like it and were able to connect with those powerful emotions. I appreciate your visit!
I found myself reading this over and over...I absolutely love it! One of my favorite subjects in poems has been the moon, but after reading even just a couple of the Carry On Tuesday poems for this prompt has me falling in love with rain! Reading through this I felt like you could be talking about a person, the personification was carried so well throughout. (Nice to "meet" you!)
~Paula :)
Thank you very much Paula. It is such a wonderful compliment to hear that you enjoyed the piece so much to put it on repeat for a bit! And it's nice to be able to become acquainted with you too :-) I'm looking forward to crossing paths with you more often on the poetry trail...
:) see you 'round the bend!
This one is beautiful.. Thanks for writing such a beautiful piece. I'm reading it again and again. Such a charming play of words.
Shikha, thank you very much for visiting and for your wonderful compliment. I am so glad you enjoy the piece!
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