watching driftwood
roll in
silently
slow sea breeze
blowing salt
into old wounds
the undercurrent
an ocean
between them
the tide
rinsing away
bitter roots
fingers
like seaweed
intertwine
their kiss
on the beach
even seagulls speechless
tongues make
slow laps
home
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner
added to dVerse Poetics: Whatever the Weather and Poets United Poetry Pantry
nice blend of the ocean into relationship images..the salt in old wounds...ouch ..and then kiss with even the seagulls speechless..i mean that is something to get THEM quiet...smiles..lovely..
ReplyDeleteI know right?! Those birds are a noisy bunch. The blending was fun exercise, glad you enjoyed Claudia!
DeleteLovely haiku!
ReplyDeleteThank you much Mad!
DeleteI love sea images and their connection to life (and - I think - poetry does it best). Perhaps there is a delicate timelessness to haiku (but, whatever the reason or way) this poem caught a bit of life - perfectly.
ReplyDeleteMe too Doodles...there's much to love about the sea, and much to draw from it. Thanks for noticing what I was trying to capture with these haiku.
Deletetongues make slow laps home....smiles...the beach is def romantic for me...and a shared kiss on the shore a wonderful thing....lol on the speechless sea gulls...
ReplyDeletelol my husband read my post and said "I'm taking you to the beach--today!" Thanks for visiting Brian and commenting :)
Deletewell doen, love the beach/sea image intertwined with the personal relationship in each stanza.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much awakened, I'm glad you connected with it!
DeleteSlow sea breeze, blowing salt, into old wounds.....I really really like this...in fact...this was a really creative take on the prompt....I enjoyed reading these little snippets, as all of them contained great depth....but my favourites were defo about the sea...I think the weather at sea is my fave...full of mystery, harsh , but sometimes beautiful and serene....you captured so much here!
ReplyDeleteStu, thank you very much, I'm honored you found it so. The sea, I agree, is awe-inspiring...from mighty beast to tranquility. Just closing your eyes and listening and breathing provides so much muse-worthy material.
DeleteI can see and smell the ocean in this poem. Beautifully written.
ReplyDelete...thank you Mary...I'm glad it made that connection for you!
DeleteLoved your Sea Series of Haiku.
ReplyDeleteGreat! Thanks Lori :)
DeleteI really like "tongues make slow laps home...."
ReplyDeleteGlad you do, thanks for commenting Sherry :)
DeleteAs if the apparent beauty of the ocean and waves symbolise a touch of secret, inner pain!
ReplyDeleteThey do indeed embody so much! Thanks Gemma.
DeleteVery nice.
ReplyDeleteThanks much Richard, appreciate you visiting my blog.
DeleteSensual. Lovely write
ReplyDeleteKiana- kind of you to comment...thank you!
DeleteThe sea brings together as much as it separates. Your poems intrigue in the way they explore those aspects.
ReplyDeleteYou make a great point, Chazinator. Always churning, isn't it? ...and moving even while calm at the surface... Thanks for your comment and for following!
ReplyDeleteNice comparison between nature and relationship :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Neha :)
Delete"the tide
ReplyDeleterinsing away
bitter roots" beautiful!
Thanks Laura--that is the pivotal haiku in the series, and I'm glad you like it :)
ReplyDeleteLove the haiku set~
ReplyDeleteUsing the beach, seaweed and ocean gives it depth ~
...thanks Heaven...
DeleteLovely lovely images.
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