slow sea breeze
into old wounds
on the beach
even seagulls speechless
Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagneradded to dVerse Poetics: Whatever the Weather and Poets United Poetry Pantry
nice blend of the ocean into relationship images..the salt in old wounds...ouch ..and then kiss with even the seagulls speechless..i mean that is something to get THEM quiet...smiles..lovely..
I love sea images and their connection to life (and - I think - poetry does it best). Perhaps there is a delicate timelessness to haiku (but, whatever the reason or way) this poem caught a bit of life - perfectly.
tongues make slow laps home....smiles...the beach is def romantic for me...and a shared kiss on the shore a wonderful thing....lol on the speechless sea gulls...
well doen, love the beach/sea image intertwined with the personal relationship in each stanza.
Slow sea breeze, blowing salt, into old wounds.....I really really like this...in fact...this was a really creative take on the prompt....I enjoyed reading these little snippets, as all of them contained great depth....but my favourites were defo about the sea...I think the weather at sea is my fave...full of mystery, harsh , but sometimes beautiful and serene....you captured so much here!
I can see and smell the ocean in this poem. Beautifully written.
Loved your Sea Series of Haiku.
I really like "tongues make slow laps home...."
As if the apparent beauty of the ocean and waves symbolise a touch of secret, inner pain!
Sensual. Lovely write
I know right?! Those birds are a noisy bunch. The blending was fun exercise, glad you enjoyed Claudia!
Thank you much Mad!
Me too Doodles...there's much to love about the sea, and much to draw from it. Thanks for noticing what I was trying to capture with these haiku.
lol my husband read my post and said "I'm taking you to the beach--today!" Thanks for visiting Brian and commenting :)
Thank you very much awakened, I'm glad you connected with it!
Stu, thank you very much, I'm honored you found it so. The sea, I agree, is awe-inspiring...from mighty beast to tranquility. Just closing your eyes and listening and breathing provides so much muse-worthy material.
...thank you Mary...I'm glad it made that connection for you!
Great! Thanks Lori :)
They do indeed embody so much! Thanks Gemma.
Glad you do, thanks for commenting Sherry :)
Thanks much Richard, appreciate you visiting my blog.
Kiana- kind of you to comment...thank you!
The sea brings together as much as it separates. Your poems intrigue in the way they explore those aspects.
You make a great point, Chazinator. Always churning, isn't it? ...and moving even while calm at the surface... Thanks for your comment and for following!
Nice comparison between nature and relationship :)
Thank you Neha :)
bitter roots" beautiful!
Thanks Laura--that is the pivotal haiku in the series, and I'm glad you like it :)
Love the haiku set~
Using the beach, seaweed and ocean gives it depth ~
Lovely lovely images.
...thanks for saying so...appreciate your visit hyperCRYPTICal
Aha! I have discovered something wonderful here!
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I really appreciate that Managua! I'll definitely check it out!
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