Saturday, July 7, 2012

Reconciling the Sea - a series haiku


watching driftwood
roll in                   
silently                  



slow sea breeze
blowing salt
into old wounds



the undercurrent
an ocean
between them



the tide
rinsing away
bitter roots



fingers
like seaweed
intertwine



their kiss
on the beach
even seagulls speechless



tongues make
slow laps
home


Copyright 2012 Jennifer Wagner

added to dVerse Poetics: Whatever the Weather and Poets United Poetry Pantry 

36 comments:

  1. nice blend of the ocean into relationship images..the salt in old wounds...ouch ..and then kiss with even the seagulls speechless..i mean that is something to get THEM quiet...smiles..lovely..

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    1. I know right?! Those birds are a noisy bunch. The blending was fun exercise, glad you enjoyed Claudia!

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  2. I love sea images and their connection to life (and - I think - poetry does it best). Perhaps there is a delicate timelessness to haiku (but, whatever the reason or way) this poem caught a bit of life - perfectly.

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    1. Me too Doodles...there's much to love about the sea, and much to draw from it. Thanks for noticing what I was trying to capture with these haiku.

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  3. tongues make slow laps home....smiles...the beach is def romantic for me...and a shared kiss on the shore a wonderful thing....lol on the speechless sea gulls...

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    1. lol my husband read my post and said "I'm taking you to the beach--today!" Thanks for visiting Brian and commenting :)

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  4. well doen, love the beach/sea image intertwined with the personal relationship in each stanza.

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    1. Thank you very much awakened, I'm glad you connected with it!

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  5. Slow sea breeze, blowing salt, into old wounds.....I really really like this...in fact...this was a really creative take on the prompt....I enjoyed reading these little snippets, as all of them contained great depth....but my favourites were defo about the sea...I think the weather at sea is my fave...full of mystery, harsh , but sometimes beautiful and serene....you captured so much here!

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    1. Stu, thank you very much, I'm honored you found it so. The sea, I agree, is awe-inspiring...from mighty beast to tranquility. Just closing your eyes and listening and breathing provides so much muse-worthy material.

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  6. I can see and smell the ocean in this poem. Beautifully written.

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    1. ...thank you Mary...I'm glad it made that connection for you!

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  7. Loved your Sea Series of Haiku.

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  8. I really like "tongues make slow laps home...."

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  9. As if the apparent beauty of the ocean and waves symbolise a touch of secret, inner pain!

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    1. Thanks much Richard, appreciate you visiting my blog.

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  11. Sensual. Lovely write

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  12. The sea brings together as much as it separates. Your poems intrigue in the way they explore those aspects.

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  13. You make a great point, Chazinator. Always churning, isn't it? ...and moving even while calm at the surface... Thanks for your comment and for following!

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  14. Nice comparison between nature and relationship :)

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  15. "the tide
    rinsing away
    bitter roots" beautiful!

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  16. Thanks Laura--that is the pivotal haiku in the series, and I'm glad you like it :)

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  17. Love the haiku set~

    Using the beach, seaweed and ocean gives it depth ~

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