Thursday, October 10, 2013

A Street for Kings


I wrote a poem
about two people
I often see
strolling together
holding hands—

is that you now on streets unending?
Every morning made
fit for a king
whispering poetry
to the ear of the one you love?
 


© 2013 Jennifer Wagner
   
Today at dVerse we are remembering poet Dave King.  I wrote my poem based on a comment he left me.

“Could easily have been Doreen and me, if we had been in Seattle. It's a beautiful picture you paint and you delineate it well. Thanks for helping to make my morning.” – Dave King on my poem 75.

31 comments:

Mary said...

What a wonderful idea - to write a poem based on a comment Dave left. And it is a gem of a poem indeed. Dave was indeed a very 'giving' kind of commenter, understanding that reciprocity is a wonderful thing. He brought joy to others and I could SEE him whispering poetry indeed.

Anonymous said...

A poignant write.>KB

Anonymous said...

A very personalised tribute - such a nice idea.

brudberg said...

What a wonderful idea. and how you exercised this to a tribute. Just wonderful

Claudia said...

a street for kings..love that you built his name in... and yes... i echo mary...he surely was a giving person... always thoughtful as well...and that comment brought me to tears again...

Brian Miller said...

smiles...it is a beautiful thought...that on the other side we can be strolling the streets with the one we love...and whispering poetry...very cool...this would be just reward for such a man....smiles.

Anonymous said...

Oh, that second stanza took my breath away...

Anonymous said...

Jennifer--this one gave me the chills...and I still have them. So evocative.

alan1704 said...

Lovely to this of words whispered on earth carrying and lasting in heaven, A wonderful thought of love.

Sarav said...

Jennifer, this is so wonderful--I love how you used his comment as a base for your poem. He was generous and kind with his comments and his poems were some of my favorites :-)

hedgewitch said...

He was such a sincere commenter--never a false note. This is a haunting, almost other-worldly piece that yet anchors us with the idea that love is the line connecting both here and there.

Grace said...

I love that you weave your words on his comment back to you ~ I too read back his comments and felt his comforting hand ~ Thanks for the lovely tribute ~

Laurie Kolp said...

Aww... I love this!

Margaret said...

Jennifer! This is just amazing, what a great idea and to "hear" his voice again like this. Yes, he is strolling hand in hand once again. (shivers went through me when I read this!)

Optimistic Existentialist said...

What a beautiful thing, using one of his wonderful comments as inspiration. Dave will be missed...

Truedessa said...

this was wonderful weaving your words with his..a touching tribute..

Lisa A. Williams said...

Love this Jennifer, especially "the street for Kings".

enthusiastically, dawn said...

That is a perfect way to honor him. A merging of words. Beautiful.

Ella said...

Wonderful way to remember an admirable and kind man~

Yes, this is beautiful Jennifer!

Wendy Bourke said...

A lovely tribute. I remember the original poem well, and reread it again today
. . . very moving.

Linda Rogers said...

What a creative and touching way to give tribute to Dave.

Anonymous said...

Cool and hopeful, Jennifer ~

TCPC said...

Very beautiful

Jeff said...

This is as good as anything I've read in a long while. Lovely, just lovely.

Justin Lamb said...

I like the poem itself and the fact that it is a tribute. Very cool.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is truly a wonder of a poem - and, hopefully, a glimpse of Dave, strolling through heaven, relishing the birdsong and the morning.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Beautiful - a wonderful tribute.
Anna

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Lovely, delicate poem, and lovely story behind it.

ND Mitchell said...

A moving poem and tribute Jennifer.

janetld said...

I didn't know Dave King myself. But what a nice, gentle tribute!

j.

Preeti S. said...

Beautiful poem.