Saturday, January 5, 2013

Proximal



she hears it
thud
within her heart
darkening that softly whispered thing
he’d wept at her feet
squeezing his chest
begging her
to come back
where he could have her, love her

but, snow white
and glistening,
she congeals in
the rush of blood—
cheeks heated, flushed
and damp
spent where he
could never bring her back,
hold her into it long enough
to let it sink
into her skin,
her fluids,
her flesh and bones

holding her, hard
and pushing love into
that bruised place
she cries
every time he touches

forged with passion
sought with tears
a groove never deep enough
to reach the watercourse
and dangles
not siphoned,
a conduit,
clamped

as she turns away
too close
to feel it anymore


Copyright 2013 Jennifer Wagner

42 comments:

  1. You paint this relationship so skilfully. This is a very moving poem.

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  2. wow lots of emotion in this one...its hard..the way i read it (which may be wrong) is she was abused, maybe not by him...but it affects their relationship...which is really hard for both parties...

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    1. Hard for both in this relationship, not wrong at all...

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  3. Tough love? Maybe but a high self-protection element.

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  4. Compelling wordplay and charged with emotions. Loved it.

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  5. Oh, wow....I agree with ND Mitchell. Those last two stanzas are stunning. "Too close to feel it anymore" takes my breath away.

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  6. Wow, wow, wow.
    I don't know what to say otherwise.
    ♥♥

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  7. she seems lie a trauma survivor who can get back to normal life owing to some misplaced sense of guilt and shame.very moving poem.wonderfully crafted.

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  8. Very emotional and vivid write ~ This part gave me the chills:

    holding her, hard
    and pushing love into
    that bruised place
    she cries
    every time he touches

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  9. This is painful to read - some things can never be healed over. I like the fact that you did not give a back story, because it takes your reader further into the moment.

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  10. This is epic and left me speechless and emotional. Wow. So emotional. Tragic.

    Great work as always.

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    1. I'm honored by your compliments Keith, thanks much.

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  11. Moving and emotional. Skilled writing

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  12. A beautiful poem! Wonderfully crafted in its rawness. So well done.

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  13. so much damage done
    can it ever be right anymore?

    such powerful words

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    1. I think it can...but will it? Thanks for coming by Rene.

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  14. Wow.. everytime i read your poems, you leave me thinking.. and your expression is so real... Awesome..

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    1. Deepak, thanks so much. Your words are encouraging.

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  15. This poem really resonates - trauma, the tears, the withdrawal for self protection.........fantastic write!

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    1. Sherry, thank you, it means so much that you think so.

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  16. I agree with Kerry. A backstory would limit this, and right now, it seems limitless.

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  17. holding her, hard
    and pushing love into
    that bruised place
    she cries
    every time he touches

    So much you have packed into this write--Just fabulous

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  18. Whoa... you give us a glimpse at the consequences, results of abuse. The damage FEELS deep and real. Saddening.

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    1. Kim, thanks for feeling it, as always I appreciate your thoughts.

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  19. Heartwrenching and powerful.... With a glimmer of hope at the end. Well done.

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  20. Wow, so powerful and I see metaphors in this poem, too.

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  21. your poem resonates with my soul as i can relate..
    very true and written from the heart.
    'as she turns away
    too close
    to feel it anymore' - i can feel hope and release in these lines. thank you so much for sharing, Jennifer, this poem just made my a bit darkened day.

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    1. Yelena, I'm so honored to have been able to make your day a little bit brighter. A comment like yours means so much.

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