Saturday, January 5, 2013

Proximal



she hears it
thud
within her heart
darkening that softly whispered thing
he’d wept at her feet
squeezing his chest
begging her
to come back
where he could have her, love her

but, snow white
and glistening,
she congeals in
the rush of blood—
cheeks heated, flushed
and damp
spent where he
could never bring her back,
hold her into it long enough
to let it sink
into her skin,
her fluids,
her flesh and bones

holding her, hard
and pushing love into
that bruised place
she cries
every time he touches

forged with passion
sought with tears
a groove never deep enough
to reach the watercourse
and dangles
not siphoned,
a conduit,
clamped

as she turns away
too close
to feel it anymore


Copyright 2013 Jennifer Wagner

42 comments:

ND Mitchell said...

You paint this relationship so skilfully. This is a very moving poem.

Brian Miller said...

wow lots of emotion in this one...its hard..the way i read it (which may be wrong) is she was abused, maybe not by him...but it affects their relationship...which is really hard for both parties...

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Tough love? Maybe but a high self-protection element.

Preeti S. said...

Compelling wordplay and charged with emotions. Loved it.

Mary said...

Oh, wow....I agree with ND Mitchell. Those last two stanzas are stunning. "Too close to feel it anymore" takes my breath away.

Priti Lisa said...

Wow, wow, wow.
I don't know what to say otherwise.
♥♥

Abin Chakraborty said...

she seems lie a trauma survivor who can get back to normal life owing to some misplaced sense of guilt and shame.very moving poem.wonderfully crafted.

Scarlet said...

Very emotional and vivid write ~ This part gave me the chills:

holding her, hard
and pushing love into
that bruised place
she cries
every time he touches

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is painful to read - some things can never be healed over. I like the fact that you did not give a back story, because it takes your reader further into the moment.

Optimistic Existentialist said...

This is epic and left me speechless and emotional. Wow. So emotional. Tragic.

Great work as always.

Anonymous said...

Moving and emotional. Skilled writing

Lisa Williams said...

A beautiful poem! Wonderfully crafted in its rawness. So well done.

Unknown said...

so much damage done
can it ever be right anymore?

such powerful words

Deepak Kripal said...

Wow.. everytime i read your poems, you leave me thinking.. and your expression is so real... Awesome..

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This poem really resonates - trauma, the tears, the withdrawal for self protection.........fantastic write!

Karen said...

I agree with Kerry. A backstory would limit this, and right now, it seems limitless.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

holding her, hard
and pushing love into
that bruised place
she cries
every time he touches

So much you have packed into this write--Just fabulous

Unknown said...

Whoa... you give us a glimpse at the consequences, results of abuse. The damage FEELS deep and real. Saddening.

mrs mediocrity said...

Heartwrenching and powerful.... With a glimmer of hope at the end. Well done.

Judy Roney said...

Wow, so powerful and I see metaphors in this poem, too.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks very much ND.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Hard for both in this relationship, not wrong at all...

Jennifer Wagner said...

True both.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks ES...really appreciate your kind words.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much Mary.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for saying it :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you very much Abin.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks for commenting Grace.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Glad you think that works Kerry, thank you.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm honored by your compliments Keith, thanks much.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thank you Kiana.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I so appreciate your kind words Lisa.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I think it can...but will it? Thanks for coming by Rene.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Deepak, thanks so much. Your words are encouraging.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Sherry, thank you, it means so much that you think so.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Karen, thank you very much.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm honored Audrey, thank you.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Kim, thanks for feeling it, as always I appreciate your thoughts.

Jennifer Wagner said...

I'm so glad you saw the hope! Thanks mrs :-)

Jennifer Wagner said...

Thanks so much Judy, glad to see you here.

blueness said...

your poem resonates with my soul as i can relate..
very true and written from the heart.
'as she turns away
too close
to feel it anymore' - i can feel hope and release in these lines. thank you so much for sharing, Jennifer, this poem just made my a bit darkened day.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Yelena, I'm so honored to have been able to make your day a little bit brighter. A comment like yours means so much.