tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post4426189562759788027..comments2024-03-14T18:03:00.898-07:00Comments on Poet Laundry: Twinkling in the Midnight Blue(s)Jennifer Wagnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-7679689886615011782013-08-05T08:42:26.876-07:002013-08-05T08:42:26.876-07:00Too good for words. I just gaze at the night sky a...Too good for words. I just gaze at the night sky and it brings a smile.Rajeshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04899689846101356598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-58402870851252024582013-07-09T13:00:55.934-07:002013-07-09T13:00:55.934-07:00oh...that last line..filled with such longing *sig...oh...that last line..filled with such longing *sigh*<br />just loved this, Jennifer~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-48100027188093622412013-06-25T05:43:01.804-07:002013-06-25T05:43:01.804-07:00You always have one line that stands out so much. ...You always have one line that stands out so much. This time it was "a jar of lidless hopes". Beautiful. Optimistic Existentialisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11507986337866049924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-32696557671394293182013-06-23T14:05:37.785-07:002013-06-23T14:05:37.785-07:00These words
__Belong to you;
Slightly adjusted
__T...These words<br />__Belong to you;<br />Slightly adjusted<br />__To form haiku.<br /><br />Just an echo, to your fine thought. _m<br /><br />stars collection<br />each dark sky's birth sends to you<br />lidless jar of dreams<br /><br />Magyarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14834296565844877410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-60355974220396324622013-06-22T17:50:20.014-07:002013-06-22T17:50:20.014-07:00Such gorgeous writing Jennifer--I especially like ...Such gorgeous writing Jennifer--I especially like the jar of lidless hopes--just beautiful!Audrey Howitt aka Divaloungerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06854425983822589062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-87092478187519269952013-06-22T15:08:42.244-07:002013-06-22T15:08:42.244-07:00So much longing in this. Beautiful.So much longing in this. Beautiful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-67315084328084742202013-06-21T20:01:38.761-07:002013-06-21T20:01:38.761-07:00"...a jar of lidless hopes," This is a g..."...a jar of lidless hopes," This is a great line. Wabisabipoet has it right. You've captured the true spirit here!Walt Wojtanikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02723314300320671675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-37970970198536443142013-06-21T19:39:10.145-07:002013-06-21T19:39:10.145-07:00I enjoyed this a lot. Very well done.
Like stars c...I enjoyed this a lot. Very well done.<br />Like stars collected<br />in a jar of lidless hopes<br />That's a great pair of lines there- very memorable. -MikeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-42498394570075727312013-06-21T18:09:22.671-07:002013-06-21T18:09:22.671-07:00Sigh.....This is a perfectly written poem of longi...Sigh.....This is a perfectly written poem of longing so true to the sedoka in form and in spirit! Loved this!<a href="http://wabisabipoet.wordpress.com/2013/06/20/sedoka-a-summer-love-poem/" rel="nofollow">Sedoka -A Summer Love Poem</a>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-82209499203418340032013-06-21T18:07:06.597-07:002013-06-21T18:07:06.597-07:00This was filled with imagery..I would like to have...This was filled with imagery..I would like to have a lidless jar filled with stars..what a lovely thought.Truedessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09079953417572207613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-68429322137039617482013-06-21T15:31:47.223-07:002013-06-21T15:31:47.223-07:00A gorgeous arrangement of words, especially the &q...A gorgeous arrangement of words, especially the "jar of lidless hopes".Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09589253190731511955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-12533704014531097792013-06-21T15:01:54.436-07:002013-06-21T15:01:54.436-07:00You take me to unexpected places, in a way that I ...You take me to unexpected places, in a way that I love. :)Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-81255823674850400462013-06-21T12:21:49.525-07:002013-06-21T12:21:49.525-07:00Oh wow, that last line is almost, almost perfect -...Oh wow, that last line is almost, almost perfect - on a musical, linguistic and thematic basis, I'd change "each" to "the" (yes, I am obsessive about the 'perfect' word) - so perfect that I felt a great desire to steal it!<br /><br />What a wonderful theme of longing, presaged from the title, through the hesitant first verse, to the declaration of the second verse and that wonderful conclusion of the darkness that "births want of you". Gorgeous!Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-35971934526964681042013-06-21T10:24:59.939-07:002013-06-21T10:24:59.939-07:00This is just perfect, Jennifer. A keeper, for sure...This is just perfect, Jennifer. A keeper, for sure.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-66321551163228222142013-06-21T07:44:54.066-07:002013-06-21T07:44:54.066-07:00Like stars collected
in a jar of lidless hopes,
ea...<i>Like stars collected<br />in a jar of lidless hopes,<br />each dark sky births want of you</i><br /><br />Love these lines...<i>felt.</i>Abruvanamedslyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00507963633079056567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-66379306531693505702013-06-21T07:44:25.215-07:002013-06-21T07:44:25.215-07:00Beautifully written.Beautifully written.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-67014616801450531442013-06-21T05:52:56.466-07:002013-06-21T05:52:56.466-07:00I do like those quilted nights... sweet dreamsI do like those quilted nights... sweet dreamsWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-44512276134741567772013-06-21T05:06:28.343-07:002013-06-21T05:06:28.343-07:00"That flicker in the
spaces between quivered ..."That flicker in the<br />spaces between quivered breaths<br />calls to me on quilted nights." deliciously poetic !!<br />Then it gets even better in the second stanza with fabulous ending, awesome !!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-28884302082956642432013-06-21T05:02:31.050-07:002013-06-21T05:02:31.050-07:00Striking... I just love this!!Striking... I just love this!!Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-21479546444770702182013-06-21T04:27:34.812-07:002013-06-21T04:27:34.812-07:00oo i like the jar of stars & lidless hopes.......oo i like the jar of stars & lidless hopes....and how you give that even more feeling in the last line....very nicely done to form...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-74725166107721468142013-06-21T04:05:21.065-07:002013-06-21T04:05:21.065-07:00I like that flickering space & breath ~ Great...I like that flickering space & breath ~ Great imagery in the second stanza, stars in a jar/dark sky birthing ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-90470535681134354702013-06-21T03:03:09.234-07:002013-06-21T03:03:09.234-07:00Beautiful!Beautiful!Lisa A. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11142569864419738394noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-13166524316442762402013-06-21T02:24:19.731-07:002013-06-21T02:24:19.731-07:00Alliterations work so great in the first stanza an...Alliterations work so great in the first stanza and a jar of lidless hopes is a great phrase. Love what you do with the form..brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-79570595308615559022013-06-21T02:05:28.574-07:002013-06-21T02:05:28.574-07:00Lovely and very nicely doneLovely and very nicely doneVandana Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10270400982093787158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6177964686272709979.post-83124481933797681312013-06-21T01:56:38.425-07:002013-06-21T01:56:38.425-07:00Love the qu words you inserted here: such good com...Love the qu words you inserted here: such good combinations.<br />lidless jar: does that mean the hopes can get in are unfulfilled or the opposite?Janine Bolléehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09857073674960699155noreply@blogger.com